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teza2000
Dec 17, 2011, 12:50 PM
Hey could you help me write a song please I am 11 and I have written over 13 songs with my best friend but now she got cancer and died I don't think I can write a song again by myself anytime soon but I really want to if you would help me write a song I would be so thankful and hopefully I would write more songs. Please help me

teza2000
Dec 17, 2011, 12:57 PM
Since my friend died I don't have the courage to try and write a song on my own we started writing a song together a while ago and then we forgot about it and I just found it I have the first verse and the chorus.
Please help me
The first verse is
I wish that we that we could be together
Even just for a day
I wish that you would say something
To make me happy
So come along in your sports car
And tell me its okay
I really want to be with you
Even for just for a day


And the chorus is

I know this may be hard to understand
But listen hard please take my hand
Take each word and hold it in
And never let go
Never let go
The way I feel for you
Shakespeare couldn't describe
The way I feel for you
Makes all the other couples cry
The way I feel for you
Is never ending love
The way I feel for you
Is so deeply true

teza2000
Dec 17, 2011, 01:02 PM
It is about this girlwho loves this guy and is trying to tell him but doesn't really know how

Wondergirl
Dec 17, 2011, 01:06 PM
You've written the lyrics. Do you want help with the music?

teza2000
Dec 17, 2011, 01:18 PM
Sure bu I thoguht I should do 1 or 2 more verses so it is a bit longer please get back to me asap

teza2000
Dec 17, 2011, 03:03 PM
I mean sure but I though I should do 1 or 2 more verses to make it a bit longer please get back to me asap soz I was typing fast

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 01:07 AM
Is there any other things you think I should mention in the other verses because as I said I wanted to add more verses
Please get back asap

Wondergirl
Dec 18, 2011, 09:18 AM
Include a verse about how things used to be, how great they were.

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 09:29 AM
How things used to be for what?
Can you help me write it

Wondergirl
Dec 18, 2011, 09:41 AM
Something about how you used to do this for me and that for me to show me you loved me: stroke my cheek with your finger or tuck a flower behind my ear or look at me with your soul in your eyes -- something like that.

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 11:13 AM
But is about a girl who is trying to tell this guy she loves him not where the guy has tried to tell the girl he loves her

Wondergirl
Dec 18, 2011, 11:14 AM
Write about how things used to be...

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 11:15 AM
Sorry for moaning(well I'm not moaning ) but I'm just upset that my friend died and because we wroe this together and it won't seem the same without her :'(

Wondergirl
Dec 18, 2011, 11:19 AM
But now you are going to honor her memory and do a great job with it and know that she's smiling about the song that you are finishing writing.

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 12:33 PM
But it is about a girlo who loves the guy wand she is rying to tell him

Wondergirl
Dec 18, 2011, 12:48 PM
What was before this? Are they friends only so far? Does he even know who she is? Have they had a relationship and are now broken up? I would think she would have some kind of memory of him and would want to get him to think of the good things in the past, even if he doesn't really know who she is. She wants to appeal to his longings for love and maybe for her.

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 01:27 PM
What we were thinking of was he doesn't know she exists but since she first saw him she had loved him and then one day they were in the same room together alone or something and she goes up to him and tries to tell him that she loves him and that is what the song is the things she says

Wondergirl
Dec 18, 2011, 01:47 PM
Then give the backstory in one of the verses.

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 03:04 PM
Would you have time to help me write it sorry it won't take me long to get back ino writing songs but just for now can you help I promise I won't keep bovering you

Wondergirl
Dec 18, 2011, 03:08 PM
I am horrible at writing songs. If this is that important to you, you'll have to find the time, or just wait for a bit and let it sink into your brain so ideas start to flow.

teza2000
Dec 18, 2011, 03:19 PM
Oh OK I will wiat for a little while and hen get back tto it after xmas hopefully I should be badk writing songs again then so thanks for the help you have given me I wouldn't be able to carry on writing songs without you help thank you so so much