Okay sorry for the first post that messed up!!

Okay so I'm co-writing this song with my band member. I want to know how it is so far. It needs a lot of work I know. But would you listen to it? And does it sound like it could go both ways? Cause I'm a girl and the co-writing is a guy. He hasn't seen or heard what I have yet, so I need it to be kind of perfect when I show him! And he'll be singing so yeahhh... so here it is, feel free to leave comments and opinions! Thanks.

"here together, gone forever"


It started as a game,
Ended with a heartbreak,

You were my forever,
And I was your always,

We laughed and we cried,
We had our ups and our downs,

But you're leaving today,
And I'm not okay,

I loved you,
And you loved me,
We we're here together,
Fighting forever,

I watched with tears in my eyes,
As you said your final goodbyes,
You got to me,
And I didn't want to let go,
I held on tight,
Prayed we'd be all right,
But I know I'm just holding you back,

Cause we were here together,
And I know you're going forever,

All I'll have are the memories,
Of you and I,
Trying to forget the goodbyes,
When you cried,
And I wanted to die,
We fought that night,

When we were here together,
And now you're going forever,

Well what am I supposed to do,
With this half empty heart, Its broke in two,
And the other half is with you, You left,
And I don't know what to do,

Without you be my side,
Nothings new,
But the memories of when you were here that day, And now you're gone forever. __________________________________________________ ____________________Its about a boy/girl having to move away or go to college, if this has ever happened to you, feel free to help with the lyrics, or share stories! I'd love to hear them! Thank

Hey,
Sounds good - although it is hard to say for sure given it is only the lyrics. As a suggestion - why don't you try to incorporate the changing of seasons... adds another dimension that would work well with the nature of the topic.
Good luck! =)