janvy2k
Nov 18, 2006, 11:46 PM
1. Read the following document and revise it so it follows these guidelines. Be sensitive to audience needs, Projecting the company's image, control style with conversational tone, and appropriate voice, Choose strong words that will help create effective sentences and coherent paragraphs. Evaluate content and revise readabity, then edit and rewrite for conciseness and clarity. Use effective design elements and suitable layout for a clean, professional appearance.
Ok I believe that is how the professor wants it done. Now for the questions. There are 2.
This is what needs revised:
1. I am a new publisher with some really great books to sell. I saw your announcement in Publishers Weekly about the bookseller's show you're having this summer, and I think it's a great idea. Count me in, folks! I would like to get some space to show my books. I thought it would be a neat thing if I could do some live airbrushing on T-shirts to help promote my hot new title, T-shirt Art. Before I got into publishing, I was an airbrush artist, and I could demonstrate my techniQues. I've done hundreds of advertising illustrations and have been a sign painter all my life, so I'll also be promoting my other book, hot off the presses, How to Make Money in the sign Painting Business.
I will be starting my PR campaign about May 2000 with ads in PW and some art trade papers, so my books should be well known by the time the show comes in August, In case you would like to use my appearance as part of your publicity, I have enclosed a biography and photo of myself.
2)2.What are the strengths and weaknesses of the original document from the original document?
Ok I believe that is how the professor wants it done. Now for the questions. There are 2.
This is what needs revised:
1. I am a new publisher with some really great books to sell. I saw your announcement in Publishers Weekly about the bookseller's show you're having this summer, and I think it's a great idea. Count me in, folks! I would like to get some space to show my books. I thought it would be a neat thing if I could do some live airbrushing on T-shirts to help promote my hot new title, T-shirt Art. Before I got into publishing, I was an airbrush artist, and I could demonstrate my techniQues. I've done hundreds of advertising illustrations and have been a sign painter all my life, so I'll also be promoting my other book, hot off the presses, How to Make Money in the sign Painting Business.
I will be starting my PR campaign about May 2000 with ads in PW and some art trade papers, so my books should be well known by the time the show comes in August, In case you would like to use my appearance as part of your publicity, I have enclosed a biography and photo of myself.
2)2.What are the strengths and weaknesses of the original document from the original document?