Hello; I'm trying to start a band and It's going to be hard rock but I also want some calm piano songs on are Demo CD too. Kind of a Evanescence thing. But it is so hard wrighting songs. All I'm asking is for some one to turn my horrible songs into magic. Do not laugh when you read this but this is all I've got.

"What if there was no price to pay?
I'd do things my way
I wouldn't be bleeding my heart dry
We don't need this screaming
Don't yell at me becaues you prayed for me to die
If only I were breathing
I'd say to you goodbye
If only I left today......."

I know "Har Har" it sucks but give me a break I'm only 12 and it just came to me and I wrote it down. Anyway, please fix it or if you can wright a song for me using my words. I would be so grateful. Thanks.

Hi, AmyLeefreak!

I can help you with writing songs! But, the first thing that I would like to ask you is, what might be the title to what you've posted here, please?

Knowing that, will help me to help you to fix it up.

Thanks!

Hey this is Amy Lee freak and I would like the this piece to be called Goodbye. Thanks for reading it and for trying to help.:D

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

I've done some re-wording and left out some things from your song and also added some thins, so that it will have a better metrical flow to it. It can always be re-worked and re-worked. I'm sure that you get the idea as to how it flows better this way.


Goodbye

What if there was no price to pay?
I'd do things my way____
I wouldn't bleed my heart dry
I'd do things my way____

CHORUS

We don't need this screaming
I'd say to you goodbye____
If I were only breathing
I'd say to you goodbye____

CHORUSThe following would be a good start for another verse. I would suggest splitting the sentence apart and making it into two sentences.


Don't yell at me because you prayed for me to die.

I would suggest continuing on with a couple more verses.

What I've done are only suggestions. Please let me know what you think.

Thanks!

Oh, wow, that's so awsome! Thank you. That really lets me see what I've written in a new way. Thank you so much!

Hey, I want to run this by you. To see if I've gotten any better.:D :o

"Burning in my own skin
The truth dares to seep through, to you
Just like a whisper
The words slip by your ear
Never taking in what you had to say
I'm lost without you
I've lost myself, again

Maybe, just maybe
I shouldn't have to lie
I just can't stand to see you so alive
I'm ready to break
The sun will have to set today
So my darkness can come out to play

Burning in my veins
Life seems to fade
Dripping down your face
bleeding down my hands;
The blood turns your eyes red

So I pray, I pray, I lose myself and pray
That the rain will wash away this this pain
My tears will only take what's left of me
So have it
So burn me in your hate
It won't break me down
I'm already broken can't you see?
How lost I am without you

And I guess I'll just lay here
Bleeding as you do
So i guess you'll just have to see
What has become of me"

"Walking in my sleep; havn't I told you I'm not only dreaming
Seeping past my lips; I dare to say what's inside of me
My soul cries for fogivness; trust, I would never hurt you that way
Some walk away from love but I'm here to stay

Sunlight burning my skin; darkness cinsuming my mind
I try not to qiuston this emptyness
The anser lays in my heart; never even thought about it
But, why do I lay here dieing, I believed in you
They see me pass them by but, they don't hear my screaming
I can't feel the bleeding anymore

Open your eyes into the night
No more dreaming; that's through
Just rest your head in this soft box, the dead awaits you
No more dreaming, your not sleeping
Your life is really breaking away

Sunlight buring my skin; darkness consuming my mind
I try not to qousition this emptyness
The answer lays in my heart; never even thought about it
Till I saw you.....

I should have never trusted you
You brought on this deadly chill
Your the fever I can't sweat out
Tell me what I'm living for
Becaues right now it's pain
it's the pain....
I'm only bleeding so I don't have to think about
Anything, only my place in the grave

I've opened my eyes
for the first time
I've only said it
Never belieaved that you've given me evrything
So now I'll just take my place
in the grave....."

"Tell me how to beleave that she's gone
Time and time again I feel her precise taking over my mind
I wonder where I stand becaues right now I'm alone
Seeing through her eyes; I'm bleeding
Out all the lies that make me seem so...

Hey,I just wanted to say,I think your writing is really good,you can write a song,I'm not ha ha ing ,and good for you!

You need a chorus to break the verses,and bring it all together.

Keep it up.

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

I haven't been able to get online for most of this week because of phone problems.

I agree with redhed35 that chorus breaks are needed for your song. I also think that shortening some of the lines would help, too.

I'll work on what you've written more, when I have the time.

Thanks!

Hey, redhead! Thanks. And I do agree that I need to work out a chores and shorten things up a bit but, I just love wrighting stuff on here; that's when I think my best; it's werid. Music is my therapy.:)

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

Do you play a musical instrument? If so, what do you play, please?

Thanks!

Am learning paino at the momeant. Please excuse my spelling; by the way. I like, play it every day just to get an ear for it. But, I will be taking lessons next month.

Tell me the truth; she's not gone
I see her time and time again
Staring back at me; my reflection doesn't even know me
It can't even tell you I love you
This mask hides away the real truth
And you'll never look deep enough to find,
I'm not hiding; I'm in plane sight


Fading away each day
Innocence blows away
Holding on to her screaming
That there's no escape your iron gates
Of worthlessness, Oh honey your so helpless
Trembleing in my hands;
Comsuming your mind;
I won't bow down like the last time!

Dreaming of you
Hands all over me
Crying myslef to sleep at night
Oh, all the things I've seen
I can't stand this; Your eyes searching for there place
I can't take this; I won't be taken
Again

(Just to let people know I'm posting these mostly becaues it get's my anger out and if you see a lot of these 'things' I'm not always asking for help.)

Hi, AmyLeefreak!

I'm here, right now! What are you learning how to play on the piano, please?

Thanks!

What do you mean? Like a song?

I mean like a piece or a song. There's a difference between what a piece is and what a song is.

Thanks!

Are you still there, AmyLeefreak?

Thanks!

WOW HUN! For a 12 year old, You're pretty poetic with your words. But don't let them all be sad songs. Throw some happy stuff in there too. Something positive. IT can help with an artist's psyche. It's funny though, because it's seems easier for most to write about sad or negative things.

Just remember positive thinking when it comes to your beautiful artistic ability also. Something with an uplifting message. If you can write something beautiful that's dark,I'm sure you can create GORGEOUS happy music for your positive moods! BEST OF LUCK!

You've made some excellent suggestions there, ohsohappy!
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You've made some excellent suggestions there, ohsohappy!

Thank you! I like to think positively! :) It helps people focus more throughout the day. Incorporating that into her music could give her some very good insight. I think a lot of her influence comes from what she listens to. Which is good, but I'm sure she could find a way to put more of herself in there. I'm not saying she has to write Hannah Montana songs (I can't stand her music) But, something more personal to her.

Hi again, ohsohappy!

Perhaps what she is writing is very personal to her? It will take a bit of delving to find that out, though.

I do like you idea about accentuating positive things! An excellent thought by you!

What we write, is a matter of choice...

Thanks!

Well yeah that's quite possible. But even so, It would be an excellent idea for her to delve and express her happy side. Soo much sorrow for one so young.

Oh, gosh I hate Hannah Montana and them but, I'll try. Happy songs are just so hard to do without being all corny.

Well, like I said I'm just now learning and I'm trying to play a song called Good Enough by Evanescence. a.k.a Amy Lee.

It's funny when you broke my heart
It was a rainy day
Clouds closing in
To say I made a mistake
Cried myself to sleep tonight
Thinking "What have I done"
But, when I thought life was washed away
I opened my eyes to find it wasn't like yesterday

Behinde the black lace
Opens up the world
Nothing to tell me
I was better off alone
I stand in the sun
To enbrace the feeling
Not even caring if it's not me

It's Saturday and I sit here missing
Everything that brought me to life
All the tree's in my field of innocne
Made my heart race
But, you came and took me away
I wore a smile on my face
Looking back I know it's still sits
Deep inside

Behinde the black lace
Opens up the world
Nothing to tell me
I was better off alone
I stand in the sun
To embrace the feeling
Not even caring if it's not me

(That was my first kind of Happy song thing) I'll work on it later

Wow! I think I did a really good job. But, please let me know if you find anything that needs to be fixed before I start to work on some music for it.


Lay here
So I'm not alone
Now you hate me
Without a guess I would fall
Made myself believe that
He's so wrong and could never save me

Breathing without me
Your only breathing without me
Just two worlds between us
I know it's hard
But, don't follow me
I've found my place without you
My name was on that grave before you
There's nothing you can do
I've fallen into his trap
Unforgiven, I reached for his hand

Don't take in each word
They say I left becaues I'm worthless
Never to think that their words took me over the edge
When you've crossed that line
Tell me how does it feel
To be so cold inside
Your body becomes numb
I need to feel something again

Breathing without me
Your only breathing without me
Just two worlds between us
I know it's hard
But, don't follow me
I've found my place without you
My name was on that grave before you
There's nothing you can do
I've fallen into his trap
Unforgiven, I reached for his hand

I'm better off without this
But, why did you lie
She died and you siad I'd be Ok
He touched me and you said you had me
What happened to never letting go?
I thought I knew you
I couldn't stand it anymore

Breathing without me
I'm just breathing without you now
Just two different worlds
And yet you cry as lay
In you arms
Drinking in your tears
I lay there bleeding
But, I know I'm still here
It's just not the same as yesterday...

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

I'm still not sure what you're able to do, musically. Are you really able to play the sheet music to "Good Enough" by Evanescence on the piano?

If you could give me more of an idea concerning what you're able to play, that would be helpful.

Thanks!

Well, I'm just now learning. I'm only able to play at my friends house and will be taking lessons soon. I'm in choir so I'm learning how to also read music a little better. So I'm a little unsure myself

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

So, are you able to play both the right and left hand parts at the same time for what you're wanting to play, please?

Thanks!

Well, I'm just now learning. I'm only able to play at my friends house and will be taking lessons soon. I'm in choir so I'm learning how to also read music a little better. So I'm a little unsure myself

Learing to read music get's easier with practice. I've been doinmg it for nearly 8 years and I still get stuck sometimes. But it's a really good skill to have. I'ts pretty much like reading another language. The hardes part for me is the rythms, not the notes. You'll do fine!! Just keep practicing! :)

Hey,I've been following your post,your songs are very dark,but I think with the haunting music they will be very good..
There is a song by alanis morrisete called 'uninvited' that kind of melody might suit..

You know how you want the song to sound! Keep up the good work,your doing great.

How do you want your song to sound, AmyLeefreak? Also, would you like to be able to play it on some kind of a keyborad?

Thanks!

Well, I'm not really sure. I know I want it to be very dreary with just a piano with the first verse and then have it build up; like the anger of girl in the story. I will be singing it and I have kind of a low voice that can hit high notes (It's werid) So when the song hit's it's piont of just mmm... letting the music burst out it be just be harder.

There's something in the wind
A feeling I only get
When I see you
Time passes by
And I still want the memory to haunt me
There's something wrong
I'm not alone
Your holding me in your arms
God help me if I'm dreaming

Moonless night's turn to a shad of grey
The wind blows softly at my ear
Whisper's of their story's
Breaking the silence
Once breaking me
I'm not the only one
Now I'm not alone

Laying here
Looking up at sky
You say that you love me
I don't even have to think
I've loved you to
And I know I'll have to watch the dream fade away
I just want to live this day

Do you hear her screaming?
Out my pain
Such a pity that I ruined her life
Just know that
No matter what she said
I'm still breathing

So cry, I'm still here
Bleed, out the fear
I say fall but, no ones there
They all left long ago

You tell me
That you have it all
Then why do you cry on the inside?
Your heart is broken
Along with anything you ever had

So cry, I'm still here
Bleed, out the fear
I say fall but, no ones there
They all left along ago

Your so blinded
In the light
While I lay in the dark
When I cry when your gone
Your off getting what you've ask for

Oh, where has she gone to
Just yesterday she breathed
With such joy
But, now were not the same
It's much colder than yesterday
And he even hides the truth
She knows it was you

Oh, where, where has she gone to?
Just yesterday she was here
Holding the child you've taken
Breathing out his last breath
Now were not the same
It's much colder than yesterday

Tell me do you cry at night
Do you regret goodbye
I remember the words
"Oh, how he loves me so"
And even though you hide the truth
She knows it's you
Hands around her neck
Holding onto her last breath

Where has Laci gone to?
Drowning deep in your sencless hate
And yet you lie to me
Saying that you were blinded
He feels no sorrow for
His mistake

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

I can see that you're writing again. Is what you've written in post #38 a continuation of the song in post #37, please?

Thanks!

Well, I guess it could be but, the second one is about a friend of mine that died and the other is just random

Is the reason that you tend to write things that are sad, because your friend died? I'm sorry about the loss of your friend.

Thanks!

Yeah, thank you. But, my life isn't all dark and gloom it's just the wrighting that brings it out.
Just so you know...

Feels like I've hit rock bottom
Love life and maybe heaven will give you a turn
I push, push closing the door
Just you and me in the dark
You can't save me

Heart breaking silence
Screaming in your ear
Can you hear?

Sun setting behinde me
All fallen have rose
Whispering that I need to try
I stand in the middle
Hearing each word
Screaming to decode
Your heart breaking thoughts
Somehow I know
That this was never to become
I'm better off alone

Watching me
Your never without me
I'm not taking in the lie
No, I don't want to sit on your petistal
I'm not your prize
I can feel your breath
Burning me to ashes
I guess this is me
I know that she is gone

I see a closed door
So high up I wonder
How it doesn't fall
It's all true; this is my time
I need
To embrace the heavan light

God help me
I fear; Erace my mind
Take away all that I know
God save her
She"s fading

Take your hand
Ease the pain
Make the rain wash it away
I see the closed door
I wonder how doesn't it fall
So much preasure
Why don't you break?
How can you stand so tall?
This was never to become
I think I'm better off alone

I lay still in the dark
No one will find me
You speak of my name
How can you see?
I know that your missing
But, that girl isn't me

Ok, so I know this isn't helping at all.
BUT OMG! The songs I have just read from you then are all like... WOW! I absolutely LOVE them! GOOD LUCK! BTW: I'm 12 too, and I sing, I also need help writing a song too because unlike you I write absolute crap songs! Lol!
You. Are. Amazing!

Wow, thank you. And just practice and practice and you'll get better. Sing about different things around the house then the words will just come to you.

This is more me I think. My teacher said one day that he want's us to be perfect and I thought that he was foolish for saying that becaues we will never be perfect; you can lie and hide your flaws but there always there. I am also a deep beleaver in god and at the end I'm saying that we will never be perfect until we go to heavan (See past the light)


I open my eyes
Seeing evreything
For the first time
Breaking out
Of the land of dreaming
Released from my land of stories


So many lies in this world we live in
Makes me want to dream again
All I see has it's place here
Without me your still breathing
As I fade to light

Am I so out of reach?
If I fall
Will you be calling my name
She's slowley drifting
All that's left of me
Hiding from what I've become

So many lies in this world we live in
Makes me want to dream again
All I see has it's place here
Without me your still breathing
As I fade to nothing...

Close your eyes
Turn off the lights
I'm never turning back
I lay here safe inside of me
But, still can't find myself
In your lie

So many Lies in this world we live in
Makes me want to dream again
How can you say
I need to be perfect
If I can't even
See past heavan's light

K, this song is really speacle to me. So please tell me what to fix and what to keep. :) sorry for miss spellings

Save her...
Save her...
So many qiuqtions whiper
Screaming at me that I'm lost
A locked door
Of fogton memorys
Long ago this was my refuge
Now I see all my wrongs
Have taken you

Silence burns into earth
One last breath
Then down on your knees
Pleading
For one last try
I just want to say
I'm not crashing down
I'll keep crawling on my knees

Seeping out under
Coming in closer
I can't find myself
In this light

Save her.....
Save her........
SO many qiuqtions whiper
Screaming at me that I'm lost
A locked door
Of fogton memorys
Long ago this was my refuge
Now I see all my wrongs
Have taken you

Such a shame
That you

Hi, AmyLeefreak!

Is that about someone in your life right now?

Thanks!

Wow! This site has helped me so much! Thanks for your help; Evreybody.


Something's changed
In the earth
All I know now
Seems not to matter
Each second counts for something
I know this
Becaues without it
I would would be lost

Here behinde the door
I hide away
Praying to God
That you'll forgive me
For my mistake
Undersatnd
I just felt alone

I've found myself in a dream
Your cold dead eyes
Seeing right through me
If only looks could kill
I would have been gone
Long ago...

Here behinde the door
I hide away
Praying to God
That you'll forgive me
For my mistake
Understand
I just felt alone...

Two nights after
I left
I came back to
Try for one more chance
Not surprised to see
That were better off without me

Where is my home?

Two more years
Pass by and
Now I lay below
Shaking the earth
Beingth your feet
Pleading for fogiveness
Please, I feel so cold...

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

I'm glad that you're having fun expressing yourself here! What about the question that I asked in post #49, please?

I will return and do some editing for you, if you would like for me to do that?

Thanks!

Ya, my friend. She's into a lot of bad stuff and now I can't even talk to her anymore and there's nothing I can't do. And I wouldn't mind at all if you helped me out with it.

Ok, I'm not trying to copy any songs here but, please check out Field of innocence by Evanecence. I think that the music sounds awsome and something like that would sound great here; thanks.


He had me going for the trap
He even held me right
Just before my heart burned black
I don't know how
But, there's something wrong
He told I was his
Even when I didn't belong

Can't you see me?
I'm not your paper doll
So crumbeld up inside
And yet you say
That I'm the prize
Darling that's not me
She's still here
Buried deep;
Hideing in the ashes

With each step we take
We leave a trail
An essence of lies and
Our senselessness...

Somehow in the darkness
You found me
Somewhere in the darkness
There must be a light
I'll find my way out

Can't you see me?
I'm not your paper doll
So crumbled up inside
And yet you say
I'm the prize
Darling; That's not me
She's still here
Buried deep;
Hideing in the ashes

Can't I be forgotten
Left here in the cold
Where I'll grow numb
Where I can't be harmed
Becaues I can't hold on
To this lie... anymore

So when I'm gone
Remember who I really was
Not what you've seen
I lie deep

Just saying; now that I've been wrighting a lot on here I've learned that a song doesn't need to be verse, choris, verse, choris, end. I mean do any bands not do that? I don't like it. And I'm getting very nice things said to me; thanks. But, I also would like to know were I'm going wrong. Each time I read these I say "That could have been so much better" What am I doing wrong?

Hi, AmyLeefreak!

A song can be written any number of different ways. You don't really have to tailor what you write after what you hear others have done. Although, there are certain ways of writing songs that help a song to have form and balance, so that the people listening to it will enjoy it the best because of being able to expect something because it will have form and balance.

Do you know what I mean here, please?

Thanks!

Ya I do. Just not random stuff in each verse or something like that, I know what you mean.

How about we write the lyrics to a short, happy song now, where it's really well balanced and fits a kind of meter?

Thanks!

I'm still here, AmyLeefreak!

Are you?

I already have an idea for a song, if you'd like to try something together.

Thanks!

Sure let's do it! What did you have in mind?

I don't know why I wrote this:p


Where has my love gone?
I'm so lost in myself
Trapped alone with my own thoughts
The screams of my
Lonlyyness
Remains unheard
Before all is lost will
You remember me
Or am I just so alone


My body cries for more pain
My heart cries for dovotion
I will aways carry
Their words of resent
The words that bring me back to this state

Never meant to be so cold
I just gave into the thought
Of you'll forgive me
It was never to become
But, it all seemed true
Was it so wrong to say you love me?
Before all is lost
Will you remember me
Or am I just so alone?

Grey clouds filled with cries
Come to place our loved ones
Their last words spoken
Pour down in silence
I'm to remember this day
As the day we lost







(Screams)
(I'm not talking to her
Stop looking at me
I'm so sick of it
I'm not going
Leave me alone
Can't you hear me
I sware today
I'm going to die)

Sure let's do it! What did you have in mind?

Just something with short lines for the verses so that you can learn how to balance within a verse better.

Who is someone in your life with whom you really like to do fun things together, please?

Thanks!

My friend Emily. To help you out we like to joke around and we can tell each other anything.

Sparkling lights of joy and love
Drawl us closer to Chrismas day
We all dream in silence
Snow converts the earth
As an ice blancet to numb
The burning core

Our world changes day to day
When night paints the sky black
When we lose a life to heavans shining light
Or as snow fills the earth with a bitter chill
We dream to see what lies before us
A world of shadow and mystery
To let them hold on to our love before they leave
Or to open our eyes to a cold but, new day
I'll always want to say
That each day is the same
But, deep down I know that you'll find something
If you look deep

My friend Emily. To help you out we like to joke around and we can tell each other anything.


My Friend, Emily

Emily is my friend
We share a lot together.

How's that for a start? Would you please continue?

Thanks!

Sparkling lights of joy and love
Draw us closer to Chrismas day
We all dream in silence
Snow converts the earth
As an ice blancet to numb
The burning core

Hey, AmyLeefreak!

I really like that! It's cool! :D

Thanks!

Thanks!

Though were different
We can't be apart
We've been through drama and lies
But, the laughter meands my broken heart
I will never trust anyone else
My secrets are her's

Sorry if it sounds to corny; let me know what you think and I'll work on it

I'm with redhed -- your talent for writing lyrics is impressive. Keep it up!

Gosh, I wish I could sing! I would be singing these things all the time.


Look at her
In that broken mirror
Hidden away
Becaues we couldn't
Take more
Of the lies, the words of hate
I was never yours
Oh, but, babe you're my queen
Of this kingdom built on dispise
I never said yes
You'll never take it
So I guess this means
That your up for the ride

Your nothing without me
(don't try to run again)
I've seen evreything
(don't try to hide away)
You're the one and only
For my love

I've been through the heart break
Lack of dovion
No one there to catch me
But, if I fall
That's my place
Down below
I never said yes
You'll never take it
So I guess this means
That your up for the ride

Your nothing without me
(don't try to run again)
I've seen evreything
(don't try to hide away)
You're the one and only
For my love

(I only live for you
I'd even die for you
And if it takes forever to have you
Then I'll be here waiting)

Don't try to save me
I'll find my way out
You'll see who I can be
Never thought of the world
As a place to fear
Who am I?
To say I've fallen down
And you'll never
Have to cry again
Becaues I'll lead us out

Night fills the sky with darkness
We can't hear your screams of fear
No light to allow your escape
Forever you'll be with me
In this madness

Tell me how I cannot see
What lies deep inside of me
You've heard the screams
I've watched her bleed
And you say I can't be her anymore
Without even knowing

Laying low
She pleads for my acceptance
Never to know
She'll never break free
From the darkness

No! It cannot be
I won't beleave in what I'm seeing
Slowley I'm slipping into another mind
Drifting away from life
No! It cannot be

Gently my world twist
I'm seeing evreything
Looking past the lace
I see their lies
Maddness and betrayal
Burning into my core
This cannot be

Laying low
She pleads for my acceptance
Never to know
She'll never break free
From the darkness

No! It cannot be
I won't believe in what I'm seeing
Slowley I'm slipping onto another mind
Drifting away from life
No! It cannot be

Trapped behinde cold, dead eyes
My life lies in the night
No! This cannot be me
(Breaking free
She is unleashed
Takeing over me
Hides in my mind
No more real life
This cannot be)

Hi,
I really like your song! I don't have any critique for you. I do have a cool tip for you for future songs, though.

Check out this link below. It is a free online "rhyming" dictionary. This is an exciting "tool" for writing songs and poetry when you are in need of words that rhyme.

Click here: FREE Online Rhyming Dictionary (http://www.rhymer.com/)

Have fun... ;):):D!!!

Wow that's awsome! Thank you.

Don't try to scream, don't try to break through
He'll only believe in what he sees
Breaking out, falling down, and bleeding dry
And to think, I thought I'd reach the top
But, now I've found
That I've lost again

It's all true
I'm about to break
But, now that your gone
I'm a little unsure
Maybe it's in my mind
Breaking free to take over our lifes
Maybe it's in my mind
Here to take over all of me

Don't try to run from me
It's in your eyes
You're my sacrifice
Don't try to hide away
Your all mine
You're my sacrifice

Alone you'll be
Sitting in the dark
Wondering about me
Takeing chances
You always said
That I was never worth it

If your going down
Then take me with you
If your going to scream
Let yourself be heard
But if your going to take my world away
Then you better leave

Not afraid to live my life
And I know I'll never reach the sky
But, not going to let you
Change my mind

Do you remember me?
Becaues I still remember you
I'm feeling so alone now
I believed in you
Where has are love gone?
Stolen away becaues we were so young
I simply cry myself to sleep at night
What else could I do?
I'm so lost without you

How long will it be?
Before you see me
Not what they tell you
Just simply the truth
I never said that I was down again
They think I don't know but I see them laughing
How about one more day?
Trapped alone in this place
Just one more lie
No more saddness

It will not be long
Before all is lost
I mean, what would you do?
If I were not there with you
Just one more day
No turning back now
Life is all about takeing chances
No backing out

Sacrifice
You really had me
Falling down
But I caught myself
Sacrifice
Your all mine now
It's burning in your eyes
The truth still lies
I knew that there was something about you
And now I see, that you loved me

Now that your gone
I will never hear the words
Now that your under
Lost forever
I will always be lost here
Never to recover

Just when I thouht I had it all
Somehow, you put me down

How many days have gone by?
Hard to tell in this blinding light
When will the sun come down?
Stop telling me to give up,
No not now!

Ooo, Where are you?
It's only far
After all they've put me through
Ooo, Where are you?
It's only me
But, also the truth

How many times have I said?
I was done, I'm turning back
If only you were here you would see
I'm not that kid

Ooo, where are you?
It's only far
After all they've put me through
Ooo, Where are you?
It's only me
But, also the truth

When will are time come?
Everything will fall into place
All of this madness will be done
We can simply watch the rain,

Frozen whisper
Passing my lips
Holding you in place
Pull me down
To your sweet kisses
Pleading for forgivness

In there eye's
I see the fear
Burnging into their minds

Are you always cold?
Is this how you want to be?
Alone

Is there more to you?
Will you see past their minds
Find the truth

Dirty mirror
I can't find myself
Why do you hide?
One single tear will fall
Tonight

Can't forget my Solitude
Don't want to leave this Solitude
Forever bound with my Solitude
Never forgot this becaues...
I couldn't let you go

Never said you were at fault
Just turns out were better off alone
And if I fall it's where I belong
Never thought that I could be so cold
Come and find me
Say all that's wrong with me?

Solitude
Close your eyes
Your safe behinde them
Solitude
Turn off the lights
Hide away from you...
Solitude
Safe inside of me


And I..
I was never to go this way
Run from you and cry
Somehow I'll breath
I'll find myself
Never forgot this
Becaues I couldn't let you go

Do you feel alone?
Close your eyes your safe in the dark
Do you feel alone?
When they come and pass you by
Like your that kid out of line
Now tell me do you feel alone

We walk bleeding, lost and screaming
All this time
I've been beliving

Tell me how to be
Strong enough
Tell me how to be
Good enough
Tell me how to be enough
For your love

They live with the fear
Bound to their tears
I'm letting you know
I'll find my way out
Free of your lie

Tell me how to be
Strong enough
Tell me how to be
Good enough
Tell me how to be enough
For your love

Stay love
Come to me and stay awhile
Never leave again
Me here with my lonnyness
Never hide away
Just close your eyes
And find me

Come to me
Bring your sorrow
I'll take in your troubles
Then soon you'll see
Your just like me

You'll take in everything
Then run to cry
You hide in pain
Bleeding your heart dry

I Lay alone
Lost and cold again
I've tried to take
Your burdon away
Now breaking me
I felt so safe

We all hold back in silence
Afraid to fight
All your tears fade away
You can't cry
I stand beside you
Open your eyes
I know that this
Won't be the last lie

Say your not strong
It's all right
Tell how meaningless
This really is

Wow, haven't been on here sense I was maybe 11. Now I'm 14 and looking back at this I can't help but laugh at myself

Anyway here's some new poem things I've written, hope I got A lot better.

How did you manage to find the door
Into my soul?
Falling down through my eyes
Into a heart that's numb
There's nothing more
To campare
To having you there
But you cannot kill what lies within me
Take it all
Or leave

Coldest day in September
One I try to forget
Do you want to remember?
The darkest day yet

Wow, havn't been on here sence I was maybe 11. Now I'm 14 and looking back at this I can't help but laugh at myself

Well hello, AmyLeefreak!

Yes, it has been a long time since you've been around here! Welcome back!

I'm wondering why you would laugh at yourself, if you wouldn't mind sharing about that, please?

Thanks!