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trmpldonagn
Feb 1, 2009, 02:36 PM
I am simply curious. A recent thread reminded me of a Haiku that I wrote in the 6th grade. I have written many many poems but I believe this to be my only Haiku. Open to any criticism just out of curiosity.
Running in the sun
Children laughing, birds singing
Brings back memories
I was in the 6th grade now so go easy on me.
Thanks! :)
JudyKayTee
Feb 1, 2009, 05:45 PM
I am simply curious. A recent thread reminded me of a Haiku that I wrote in the 6th grade. I have written many many poems but I believe this to be my only Haiku. Open to any criticism just out of curiosity.
Running in the sun
Children laughing, birds singing
Brings back memories
I was in the 6th grade now so go easy on me.
Thanks! :)
I think this is very good for a sixth grade level - I'm sure you got a good grade for it. Was it published in a school or district anthology?
ScoobyDoo5
Feb 1, 2009, 06:33 PM
That's a pretty poem. You seem to be fond of children and birds. Nice work.
trmpldonagn
Feb 1, 2009, 08:59 PM
Thanks guys. Was just curious. No JK, it wasn't published in a school or district anthology. I just remember the teacher going on an on about it. He was pretty impressed but I remember not thinking it was very hard. 5, 7, 5 (syllables for each line for a Haiku) as you probably already know. Thanks again.