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mojokidz
Jan 15, 2009, 08:02 PM
How do you write a short concise business profile to present to new clients. A professional version of "tell me a little about yourself". My target audience business that provide product/service in the fashion, textile, toy and health and beauty industries for babies and moms to be.
Many thanks!
Wondergirl
Jan 15, 2009, 08:09 PM
How about you write something and we will critique it. We have no idea what this business really does and its value to customers. Do the products lift spirits? Do they improve one's appearance? Do the products smell good? Are the products earth-friendly?
Does the profile need to sell, or just be matter-of-fact?
mojokidz
Jan 16, 2009, 09:07 PM
Just wanted to acknowledge your response... I will draft something and post it for critique. The suggested questions were great, already have some ideas brewing.
MoJoMommy:)
Wondergirl
Jan 16, 2009, 09:17 PM
Look at drugstore.com or at the drugstore section of Amazon or some other online company that has products that are similar to yours. Read the descriptions to pick up adjectives and adverbs and keywords.
Clough
Jan 17, 2009, 12:12 AM
Hi, mojokidz!
If you post a draft here, that would be great! It would also be advisable not to include any contact information so that it might be construed as being advertising.
If contact information is excluded, we'll be free to give you all sorts of ideas as to how you might make improvements to the draft of your business profile.
Thanks!