These power lines trace our maps
like information on a graph
Traveled by the working class
rushing, running, shuffling for a place

Hear gentle cries and screams
from the future generation
seeing hordes of vehicles
predict the complications

Flocks of seagulls pepper the sky
only to turn to ash
Plumes of poison drift through the air
like drift wood down a lazy river

These power lines hum like a religious chant
carrying death
but no the death that comes to mind
but Eventual

Mr.Sewtan-Ty running frantically
with cinder blocks on his shoulders
a ball and chain locked to his leg
feeling as if he can never grow older...

Like sheep we run from danger
that has face value
we've no instinct for a silent fight
until the world slows

Stops spinning, stop glowing
human life will stop growing
Open your eyes
and conceive the knowledge
Someone else's problem
is exactly what you'll call it.

* If you wouldn't mind, id love some feedback on how it is, some corrections, better structure, wording, ryhming. Everything. I'd love to learn how to write better.

This is a very good draft. You clearly have real ability.

A few things:
Definitely do not rhyme.
You use the word "like" too often. Try to find a way around it. (In writing you sometimes have to find a way around certain word. You may need to do this by reshaping the line.)
The poem is spare, and that works given its content. One thing that might contribute to this is if you were to use fewer articles (especially "a").
The final stanza is quite a departure from the others, and this doesn't altogether work. I like the second person here: it arrests the reader. But the other stanza take their time and this one feels hurried.

Good luck with it. I enjoyed reading it.

Thanks Akoue! It sounds like you know a thing or two. To be honest, I love to write poetry, but find myself a little displeased with the final product. If you wouldn't mind, id love for you to share some thoughts and insights with me, teach me a few things. I write random stuff like this all the time. Sometimes, ill just be sitting in class thinking about... ohh lets say the Renaissance, and how it effects our world today, or maybe the genocide in Zimbabye and whatnot. Ill form some nice lines, write them down, and insert them later. Some help would be appreciated. There are two others I think, if you'd like to look at those, and ill post more.

And yeah you're right, the last stanza was like a "quick draw" type of thing. I just wanted to cap it off to put on here. I just want to know if my writing is any good lol

Happy to help. Just give me a heads up when you post one so I don't miss it.