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Dec 11, 2008, 10:42 AM
The morning sun reminds of your smile
Dreams of you run wild all the while
The song of the birds, like your laughter through space
And the breeze on my cheek, conjure an image of your face
The rustling of leaves, I hear your voice
Thoughts of you cancel every other noise
Will you walk with me, so we can enjoy life?
Taking away every care
You've given meaning to my smile

Rohin Arora
Dec 11, 2008, 10:55 AM
You are going good.its all practical and no air castles or something.keep up your good work.nad you,tell me when it gets completed.

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Dec 11, 2008, 11:00 AM
Thanks Rohin! What do you mean by "no air castles" ? Yeah, if I finish it, I will post it :)

Rohin Arora
Dec 11, 2008, 11:04 AM
U no building castles in the air(imaginations,which are far from realtiy are generally the part of romantic or love based poems)
Yours is close to heart in practical.
All the best.