I am writing a book, a book which at the moment I am very proud of. Every time I tell someone I get asked 'What is it called?' I have no idea.
I will give you an outline of the story so far: A girl named Dandy (excuse the silly name) wakes up one night to find that someone has set her house on fire she passes out and when she wakes up she is surrounded by rodents, rats mice etc. they can talk. She wonders why, she sees her reflection in a pond and sees that she has magically turned into a wolf. She follows a rat called George (a character based on an old friend of mine) and comes into a chamber where an ancient rat tells here everything and that she is a gifted creature known as a two soul or shape shifter, he explains that it runs in her family and that her house was set on fire by a henchman of an evil dragon who wants revenge on all shape shifters. She has to get under cover and turns into a wolf to join a pack. Her new friend George, who is also a shape shifter turns into a wolf too. They join a pack of wolves led by a giant wolf who I for some reason named Fangfull.
That is a basic outline of the story so far and I left loads of the description out but has anyone got any ideas on names?
Whew what a mouthful!

Why not just "Two-Soul and the Dragon"?

How about "Dandy's Dilemma." That's my idea anyway. Hopefully, others will come along to add their own.

These names are pretty good, but I need a wide range of ideas, I will add my current idea, it is the only thing I can think of and I am not to keen on it, my idea is just Two-soul at the moment, I am only going to use that idea if I can not think of anything else or if there are no suggestions that I think fit the story.

If there is a twist in the book later on you can name it after that

It sounds like a really interesting book, I wish I could read it

Really? I could write in the opening paragraph, just so you get a bit of an idea of how I write.

The pounding of paws against the ground.
Frenzied hooves sending up sheets of snow.
Laboured breath.
The scent of fresh blood.
Wind streaming past lean bodies.
Terrifying growling.
Teeth bared in fearsome snarls.
The hunted struggling.
The thrill of the hunt shooting through the hunters bodies.
And an overpowering urge to kill.

If you liked that then I will send more of the story in another time.:D

If you read the paragraph then could you please comment, I would like to know whether people like it, the only person who has read it so far is my mum and mums always say they like something and I don't know if other people like it too.

The Adventures of Dandy Two-Soul


Do you want it to be a series? Cause then you can think of Subtitles.

To me, the paragraph is disjointed.

While I get that you're just going for the images those phrases evoke--it's not doing anything for me.

I would either rephrase it so that it was complete sentences, or make it so that all of the phrases were in the same syntax: Air streaming past bodies. Hooves pounding---all "ing" words, or all present tense, or whatever--but the images don't flow because there's nothing to connect them at this time.

Oh well, I'm only 11 I can't help it that I don't write perfect.

Hey... you asked for critiques, and I gave one.

For being 11--I think it's GREAT. And your idea is a good one!

If you really want an honest opinion--I'd say write the book first, and then write some more, and keep writing, let it grow to be 1000 pages, and then get a good editor. You'll lose parts of your work in the process, but that's part of writing.

When people ask you for a title, I'd tell them that the right one hasn't occurred to you yet--you're more concerned about the story than its title :)

Just whatever you do, keep writing and writing. Then keep editing and editing. Learn the rules of grammar. Keep perfecting your craft. It's good so far, and after a while it will be even better.

Something mystical, say there was some sort of vital component, name it after that

It doesn't have a vital component yet, but I have ideas that I am sort of storing in my head until the right moment.

I have edited my story some more and here is a basic outline of what has happened after they join Fangfulls pack: Fangfull tells them that he needs a lead female in his pack because their lead female was killed by a bear, he asks Dandy if she would temporarily fill the post and she says yes.

That is as far as I have got so far, if you think it was a bad idea to suddenly promote Dandy to the lead female in a pack of wolves then when it gets published read it and find out how this is going to work and why I did it. If you know what I mean.

Here is the beginning of my story:

Here is part 2 of chapter 1 so far.

Its really interesting to read
I wish I could turn into a wolf
I would be a white wolf, they are more of the lone wolf type in my sense

Thanks. I am working on it. I wrote the story because I wish that was happening to me. Most of the characters are someone I know built up on so that they are unrecognisable. I moved house recently and I am basing the characters on people I knew from where we used to live.

One thing that might help is to write down everything about the character and world

Since you are creating characters they will have their own personalities, beliefs, interests, and past
Write down everything you can think of for every character that way when you are writing the story you can better show their character by referring to your notes on that character

Same with creating the world
Each town or village will have its own traditions and way of life
If you actually create the world you will be better at explaining it and making it seem more realistic
It also helps run smoothly

I don't know if this helps or not but its what I do when I write storys

Love the comment

Would read this book! Please finish it.

Born from fire, two shape shifting friends?

How about Fire Wolves?

I'll keep thinking or more.

I will finish it meandlisa. I will probably write down all the stuff about their personalities and all that.
Born from fire? I definitely do not remember putting that in.

If anyone read those pieces of work and would like me to post in more then just say and I will.

Here is the rest of my story, hope you like it, there are a few faults but I can sort them later.
Alass and Jaw Dan are both almost completely fictional.

What's with the aa?

Born of fire is maybe title, you said the girl Dandy's house was set on fire and when she wakes up she is surrounded by rodents and has turned into a wolf.

You are right, that is a good title.

Anyone who reads that please comment and if you have any ideas on a title please share them with me.:) :) :D

If you can't make a name, change your thoughts and feel more !
Enjoy creating and be serious about your futur !

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Can anyone who reads this and wants me to know what they think tell me how old they are (If you want to) I am trying to find out what age the people who like the book are because it seems that children my age find my language slightly confusing and do not enjoy my book that much. Adults seem to prefer it ( from how many people have read it that I know the age of so far ).
GODOGOOD I do enjoy creating. I am pretty creative. I draw, I read, I write and I made a clay model of a dragon which I made a stop motion animation film with.
I am not trying to boast or anything.

How About Dandy's Resurrection.. just an Idea

Thank you for your contribution, you are the first person to offer a suggestion in a while.

Any ideas on what to call my story would be appreciated.

This thread is not used at all anymore. Anyone who reads the book please comment.

Sorry I'm sick at the moment and can't get on much
When I get back I wlll answer any questions or try to give suggestions if you want
I really do like the idea though

I have recently had some critiques on my work so I have edited it. I don't know why I bother to post in this discussion anymore as nobody answers.

Hi Mystery Person, I really like your book and would love to read it once completed.

Your efforts will not go in vain...

As for a name, The best idea I have had is "SHAPE SHIFTERS",simple and something you definitely want to know more about.
If you do not get that right now, do not let it bother you, the right name will come to you when you least expect it.

But until then, continue with the great efforts, and please don't forget to send a copy to me.

I will. Thanks. My story has been edited and a lot of the one posted on this thread have been changed to be made better. "Shape Shifters" is a very good idea for a title and is similar to the one I thought of which is "Two-Souled" another word for Shape Shifter, according to my book.

I will send a copy to you once completed. Life_Coach.

Why not call the dragon Draco, and instead of putting everything into one book, have a trilogy with the first one being " Dandy: The Beginning, then Dandy: The Revenge,and finally Dandy: The Final Battle.

Thanks Mysteryperson, hey and don't let any peoples negative responses get to you,instead use it as a stepping stone to getting closer to your goal.

Wishing you all the best.

Thank you Life_Coach. Lady Emily. I like the idea of a Trilogy and I was thinking that the dragon would probably slip away at the last minute then there would be some kind of sequel with the further adventures of Dandy in it.

Anyone got any ideas on a name?
Anyone?
Does anyone think it is a bad idea to introduce another shape shifter?
I've improved my book, there is about an extra page around the bit where Dandy and George meet the pack and there are about five pages added to the end.
I don't know why I bother writing on this topic, nobody answers.

Any ideas for a name?
Anyone have critism on my work?
Anyone have some praise for me?
Anyone?
Anyone?
No one?

The book now has a name
It is called
Two Souled.