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murshyblues
Sep 28, 2007, 03:14 PM
How could I not see, what was ahead of me, the future I dreamed of the life I imagined,
It all came to an end the day I realized it was just a dream
A dream that I dream everyday and night for all my life,
the day my faith left and my hope fade, was when I realize it was nothing more than a dream, a wish that my heart made when I was asleep and awake.
Although deep inside I knew the truth, I pushed it away and pretended it was never there and kept on dreaming. I kept my faith and hope alive that one day it will all come to an end, but now I know, that day may never come.

Clough
Oct 12, 2007, 12:41 AM
I apologize that no one else has answered you.

I do like your poem. Poems are things from your heart. They can take many forms.

I have just rearranged the form of it a little bit and made some grammar changes as to the articulation all so that it is more readable and understandable. I hope that you don't mind.

I won't rate it on the basis that I like it or hate it. That wouldn't be fair. It is a good poem, overall.

Perhaps others will have some ideas as to how it could further be improved, or offer their opinion as to what they think of it overall.

jazzysoswaggy
Feb 23, 2012, 05:40 PM
I like it it heart filled and its just a good poem