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anonymousteen09
Sep 13, 2007, 08:50 PM
Your Biggest Regret

I am the one you once held at night
I am the one who hugged you tight
I am the one who was so happy we were together
I am the one who thought we'd last forever
I am the one who told you you were my everything and little more
I am the one you told you absolutely adored

I am the one you'll never forget
I am your biggest regret

I am the one who you'd always kiss
And now I am the one you'll forever miss
I am the one who always whispered "I love you" in your ear
But f*** you and forget it.. that's something you'll NEVER hear
I am the one who you yelled at and called names
I am the one who you constantly put to shame
But now I am the one who could give a less what you say or do
Because now I realize I can do WAY better than you

I am the one who sat on the rock at the beach with you when we met
But now I am your biggest regret

I am the one who to you once meant the world
I am the one who you dumped for another girl
I am the one who once sat with you in the rain
And now I am the one who watches your life go down the drain
I am the one who was blinded by your lies
I am the one whose night was filled with cries
I am the one who thought losing you was my biggest fear
I am the one that lost you... and didn't shed one tear

YOU are the one who will regret what you did
YOU are the one who will regret everything you said
YOU are the one who makes your decisions in life badly
YOU are the one who in a few monthes will be called a Daddy
YOU are the one who will live like and nothing more
YOU are the one who will marry a whore
YOU are the one who was so easy to forget
But I will forevvver be
Your biggest regret

Clough
Sep 14, 2007, 03:18 AM
And, I do believe that it's a true story.

I think that it's good that you are working out your frustrations and sorrows by writing them down in the form of poetry. I have done the same thing, countless times. Obviously, you are quite inspired to compose poetry when you are in love. You are quite good at putting together thoughts in the poetic sense. You have a talent for this. Great rhyming! You create a full circle in your thoughts - beginning, middle and ending. Your poem is very complete and meaningful. There is no room for guesswork as far as what you are trying to communicate. Your message is very clear.

I hope that you find some relief by writing what you have. You obviously have been hurt very badly.

Would you mind sharing what exactly happened for you to write as you do? I am sure that others will come along and help you to work through your frustrations.

iAMfromHuntersBar
Sep 14, 2007, 03:41 AM
All I would change is the couple of 'text-speak' words that kind of threw me in the middle of reading it... if you're going to use brilliant English for the rest of such an amazing poem, why spoil it with;


becuz now I realize I can do WAY better than you


YOU are the one who makes ur decisions in life badly


but I will forevvver be

Also I didn't understand this line;

YOU are the one who will live like and nothing more

Finally, you could do with a bit of punctuation at the end of each line depending on how you'd like the poem to read.

Other than that, a really good poem, thanks for sharing! I hope it was theraputic writing it down?

J

Moomin
Sep 17, 2007, 12:59 AM
Good work - keep this up!
I think it's good you have found a way to express yourself!

Do you enjoy poetry or is it just in times of angst you feel creative with it?

How did the person respond?

Clough
Sep 17, 2007, 09:53 PM
Well first of all I wasn't in love with him.. i'm only 16 I'm too young for that "inlove" stuff haha.. but i cared about him more than you can imagine and he had my heart in the palm of his hand and just squished it and i felt just dead inside. Thanks for all the compliments.. its the first poem i've writted so at least i know i have some sort of talent for poetry. :)) Thanks!

You are welcome!

I'm very glad that you know who you are and where you are concerning relationships at your age.

I too, know what it is like to get my heart "squished" in relationships.