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Madalexd
Aug 16, 2011, 10:46 AM
Can you correct me if I have any mistake?

"University students should pay for their own education"

Write an essay giving arguments for and against this statement and also state your own opinion.

Everyone agrees that education is a very important matter but not everyone agrees that university students should pay for their own education. Should they pay for it or not?

There are several advantages to affirm that university students should pay for their own education. Firstly, most of them spend the money of their studies in other things. For example, they prefer to buy a computer that a book. Secondly, most of them can work in order to get money for their studies. Finally, if they pay for their own education, it will help their families to save that money in order to buy any thing that they want just like buy a new car

However, there are many arguments against this statement. Firstly, critics of such families say that university students shouldn't pay for their own education because they can't work and study at the same time. For example, is someone works all the morning and during the afternoon, he/she will be really tired to study. Finally, most of university students that don't pay for their own education finish before someone that is working in order to pay their studies.

In conclusion, although this statement can be a good idea, it also has a negative side. In my opinion, it's a bad idea that students have to pay for their own education because they will not be able to work and study at the same time.

Wondergirl
Aug 16, 2011, 10:53 AM
I would help you with the mistakes, but most of what you wrote is not true. Perhaps rewrite this with better ideas and conclusions? The essay is also very confused and confusing.

Madalexd
Aug 16, 2011, 11:03 AM
Yeah, but I'm from Argentina, and I only want to see what mistakes do I have .

Wondergirl
Aug 16, 2011, 11:05 AM
Yeah, but I'm from Argentina, and I only want to see what mistakes do I have .
Being from Argentina has nothing to do with poor writing. It needs much organization. People from Argentina know how to organize their work and think logically.

Let's reorganize it. Write down the positives in one column and the negatives ina second column.