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wasusank
Jun 26, 2010, 01:47 PM
Here is what I came up with. What do you think?
Each day our children go to school to learn, only to witness some form of school violence. School violence in the form of bullying, trash talking to dangerous weapons bing deplayed.

JudyKayTee
Jun 26, 2010, 01:55 PM
This is the third thesis you are writing?

I find your punctuation to be "off." It should be "... some form of school violence in the form of bullying ... "

Wondergirl
Jun 26, 2010, 01:56 PM
Sounds good, but let's put it into good English:

Each day too many of our children go to school to learn, only to witness some form of school violence -- school violence in the form of bullying, disrespect toward authority figures, trash talking, and the secret carrying and displaying of dangerous weapons, to name a few.

wasusank
Jun 26, 2010, 02:16 PM
Com/220 class I have to come up with a thesis statement on school violence. Here is what I have so far. Each day our children go to school to learn, only to encounter some form of school violence.

Wondergirl
Jun 26, 2010, 02:21 PM
I gave you an answer on another thread.

JudyKayTee
Jun 26, 2010, 02:30 PM
com/220 class I have to come up with a thesis statement on school violence. Here is what I have so far. Each day our children go to school to learn, only to encounter some form of school violence.


My answer is the same as it was on your other thread.

wasusank
Jun 26, 2010, 02:39 PM
This is only my second, I changed my topic.

wasusank
Jun 26, 2010, 02:42 PM
Thank you both for your input. I now know I am on the right track.

wasusank
Jun 26, 2010, 03:38 PM
Now I am struggling with compelling and counter arguments. I want to use statistic to support my facts.

JudyKayTee
Jun 26, 2010, 03:45 PM
Unfortunately I don't have the time to do this project for you.

Wondergirl, take it away!

Wondergirl
Jun 26, 2010, 03:48 PM
Now I am struggling with compelling and counter arguments. I want to use statistic to support my facts.
The Internet should be rife with articles on school violence, so I'm not sure why you're having trouble. By "compelling" you mean FOR school violence? Statistics should be easy to find too. What kinds of stats do you want?