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SlyPhoenix
Mar 26, 2010, 09:07 AM
Caught in mid thought, before she even had a chance, an arm wrapped around her from behind.

It's obviously incorrect grammatically but I like the way it reads. Any suggestions?

Blue Angel
Mar 26, 2010, 09:25 AM
Maybe...

“While caught in mid thought, she didn’t even have a chance to react as an arm wrapped around her from behind.”

NomNomNoodles
Mar 26, 2010, 09:48 AM
As she pondered (this word may not be appropriate depending on what's going on. "lost herself in thought"?), an arm suddenly wrapped around her from behind before she could even protest.

SlyPhoenix
Mar 26, 2010, 09:51 AM
I like both of those options. Thank you both

Blue Angel
Mar 26, 2010, 12:01 PM
You're very welcome.

excon
Mar 26, 2010, 12:28 PM
Hello sly:

I like the way YOU wrote it. I never did like rules.

excon