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ArticMonkey
Oct 9, 2008, 02:08 PM
Heyy
Can any one help me write a song I want to write one for my mom but I'm not very good please help me
Sam
Xx:confused:
Clough
Oct 9, 2008, 06:26 PM
Hi, ArticMonkey!
Thanks for posting something here as I suggested on the other thread. I will be back on later tonight in around three hours. I'm not home on my own computer.
To start the lyrics of the song, please just post here some ideas in words or sentences about how you feel about your mom, like maybe things that you like about her and why you are writing the song.
The thoughts don't necessarily have to be in any order - just random ideas, sentences and single words by themselves are even okay. Then, we can go from there to develop the song.
Just let your ideas flow and please don't get caught up that everything might need to be perfect right off the bat.
Okay? :)
Thanks!
Clough
Oct 10, 2008, 01:33 AM
I'll be around here on Friday night Sam, in case you would like to work on something. I am looking forward to working with you on your song!
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 01:52 PM
Thanks
Do writing songs just start with writing sayings or a coupple of words that have been made up ?
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 05:40 PM
I can sing other artists songs fine but I just can never come up with one of my own
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 09:17 PM
Why do you call?
Why do you stare?
Why do you tell me to beware?
Why do you hug?
Why do you kiss?
Why do you always miss?
Is it because you love me?
Or is it because you don't?
Or is it because you won't?
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 09:24 PM
Why do you call?
Why do you stare?
Why do you tell me to beware?
Why do you hug?
Why do you kiss?
Why do you always miss?
Is it because you love me?
Or is it because you don't?
Or is it beacuse you won't?
Hi, Sam!
I'm here right now. Are those questions above the ideas for your song? Also, why are you wanting to write the song?
Knowing the answer to especially the second question will help me to know which direction we need to go here.
You already appear to have a good knack for forming some kind of structure with what you write.
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 09:34 PM
OK I love writing poetry and that's justa poem I wrote but I want to write songs because music is the only way to express myself and I want to no what it feels like to have everyone on who you are
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 09:36 PM
No that's a poem and I was wanting to put it in to a song OK forget about the one for mom I can do that later but I just want to make a song and have music and be able to name something as mine insteed of singing some one else's work it gets kind of boring like I want my own label
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 09:42 PM
OK i love writing poetry and that's justa poem i wrote but i want to write songs because music is the only way to express myself and i want to no what it feels like to have everyone on who you are
You can have a lot of people know who you are by the poetry that you write and not just by doing music.
Writing poetry is an art and something that takes practice in order to get really good at it. You already use it as a form of self-expression. You also have a good start at doing it. I know that you could be really good if you practiced it more and learned how to do it better!
Do you have a school newspaper?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 09:45 PM
No I don't really wirte anymore it kind of bores me so I sing insteed
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 09:45 PM
no thats a poem and i was wanting to put it in to a song ok forget about the one for mom i can do that later but i just want to make a song and have music and be able to name something as mine insteed of singing some one elses work it gets kind of boring like i want my own label
Okay, then let's just work on writing a song. I'll re-write your poem in such a way that it would work well set to a rhythm and also meter.
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 09:49 PM
No we don't have a school newspapper
I don't really write poetry anymore it's a little boring
I sing to keep myself entertained insteed
I'm getting tierd of sing other peoples music and want to sing my own if you no what I mean
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 09:50 PM
OK how would you do that though?
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 09:58 PM
ok how would you do that though?
It's not all that hard, once you know how to do it. The re-write of your poem into a song will be in my next post. Please be sure to answer any questions directly that I ask so that I can help you the best.
Thanks!
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 10:01 PM
Why do you call and why do you stare, and why do you tell me to beware?
Why do you hug and why do you kiss, and why do you always seem to miss?
Is this because you love me, or because you don't, or maybe because you won't?
What do you think? It would work, musically.
The above would be a good first verse for your song. Any idea as to what you would like to be the title of your song? My initial thought for a title would be, "Do You Really Love Me?"
Also, is this song about someone that you like, or just some random thoughts that you have and wanted to make into a poem?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 10:08 PM
Heyy are you still there?
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 10:11 PM
Yea it I like that name and its just some ranodm stuff
I like the re write to thanks
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 10:15 PM
I just had a thought about your school not having a newspaper, a lot schools have them and they aren't all that hard to do and because having such a thing will help the students to learn in various ways, I'm sure that teachers and administration would be supportive of that kind of thing.
If you and bunch of your friends from school got together and talked together about how it would be a good thing to have a newspaper and then spoke with some teachers and also the principal, having a school news paper once a month or even once a week might become a reality!
Students could become reporters covering and writing articles about school events, writers of opinions about things, writers of things like opinions, essays, poems and also the lyrics to songs, photographers, etc.
Having copies of a school newspaper would also become a cherished keepsake in time. It's kind of also like having a yearbook.
If you become a student staff person on a school newspaper, that's something that you could also add to your resume someday so that you might have a better chance at getting a job because a potential employer will see that you not only did the school work that you were supposed to do, but were willing to do something extra outside of the usual school day.
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 10:18 PM
Ill ask the teachers but I won't be going to the school much longer as I am getting a full time job
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 10:18 PM
heyy are you still there?
Yes, I'm still here. I just wrote you a pretty long post and it took me a little while to compose it. You do have my attention here and I do want to help you!
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 10:21 PM
I'm tierd of looking in the mirror and only seeing me when your right next to me
I'm tierd of waiting for your calls the times you said you would call and you didn't
I'm tierd of waiting for you to pull me out of the water so I don't drown
I'm tierd of running after you when you turn your back
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 10:28 PM
Clough Why do you call and why do you stare, and why do you tell me to beware?
Why do you hug and why do you kiss, and why do you always seem to miss?
Is this because you love me, or because you don't, or maybe because you won't?
Clough What do you think? It would work, musically.
The above would be a good first verse for your song. Any idea as to what you would like to be the title of your song? My initial thought for a title would be, "Do You Really Love Me?"
Also, is this song about someone that you like, or just some random thoughts that you have and wanted to make into a poem?
Thanks!
ArticMonky yea it I like that name and its just some ranodm stuff
I like the re write to thanks
Since this thread went on to another page, I decided to quote some things from previous posts so that the thread would be easier to follow and read.
How about us working on a chorus for your song?
It might begin something like the following:
Do you really love me, and do you really care...
If you'd like to do this, would you please write something to continue the chorus? You can always change anything that I've written. I'm just trying to give you some ideas and tips. It is your song and need to reflect how you think and feel.
Thanks!
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 10:31 PM
im tierd of looking in the mirror and only seeing me when your right next to me
im tierd of waiting for your calls the times you said you would call and you didnt
im tierd of waiting for you to pull me out of the water so i dont drown
im tierd of running after you when u turn your back
Is the above the second verse for your song? Please let me know.
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 10:32 PM
Umm ill work on it to night I have to go now have a good evening thank you
Xx
Sam
ArticMonkey
Oct 12, 2008, 10:34 PM
I guess I'm not quiet sure if it would fitt any way I have to goo good bye
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 10:37 PM
Do you have school tomorrow?
Clough
Oct 12, 2008, 11:03 PM
Okay, I can see that you're no longer online here. So, I do wish you a goodnight and pleasant dreams!
If what is below what you intended for the second verse, then there is a re-write of that below it. Musically, it will fit better with your first verse.
ArticMonkey I'm tierd of looking in the mirror and only seeing me when your right next to me
I'm tierd of waiting for your calls the times you said you would call and you didn't
I'm tierd of waiting for you to pull me out of the water so I don't drown
I'm tierd of running after you when you turn your back
Tired of looking in the mirror, only seeing me there, 'specially when you're right here beside me.
Tired of waiting for your calls, when you said you'd call, 'specially when you said you would.
Tired of waiting for you, to help me out of water, so that I might not drown.
I also dropped the last sentence so that the stanza would be better to match the first verse.
Things are developing here and you're doing a good job! Please keep trying!
I would like for you to check out the virtual keyboard that' on the following site. VIRTUAL KEYBOARD - PIANO (http://www.bgfl.org/bgfl/custom/resources_ftp/client_ftp/ks2/music/piano/index.htm)
When we're on here at the same time sometime, I can show you how to play your song.
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 09:37 PM
Chorus
Do you really love me
Do you really miss me
Or is this just a dream I'm living?
If not won't you send someone to wake me from my night mares
v3
Can you see I'm stronger now
I've made myself move on
I won't keep running back
I'm now justa stranger on the street
I won't let you pull me down any longer
v4
So don't cry when you wake
Cause I won't be there to comfort you
Cause I have gone I have moved on now babe
How's this?
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 09:56 PM
Hi, ArticMonkey!
Thanks for doing so much additional work!
Please give me a some time to look at and work on what you have added.
Looks like you have some great ideas!
What did you think of my revision to verse #2, please?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 09:59 PM
Yea I like it
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 10:04 PM
ill ask the teachers but i wont be going to the school much longer as i am getting a full time job
I don't know where you're located, and I don't need to know that. However, don't you need to be in school until a certain age where you are located?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 10:18 PM
I'm in [edited]
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 10:27 PM
Sam, because of your age, I needed to remove your location from your post in order to protect your privacy. I would hate to have someone who you didn't want to contact you, try to contact you, because of knowing your location and because of information they already might find out about you because of your being on this site.
Thank you for your understanding.
I would still appreciate knowing if you are required to be in school until a certain age.
I'm also working on your song right now.
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 10:30 PM
Yea until your 16 I'm leavn next year to get a full time job
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 10:38 PM
yea until your 16 im leavn next year to get a full time job
Thanks! Do you live with both your parents, and if not, what is the relationship of the person or persons to you with whom you are living, please?
I'm done with the revision and compilation of your song and will be posting it shortly. It's not perfect and will most likely take some additional work.
Thanks!
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 10:45 PM
Below, is your song with the suggested revisions. Please let me know what you think. Thanks!
Verse 1
Why do you call and why do you stare, and why do you tell me to beware?
Why do you hug and why do you kiss, and why do you always seem to miss?
Is this because you love me, or because you don't, or maybe because you won't?
Verse 2
Tired of looking in the mirror, only seeing me there, 'specially when you're right here beside me.
Tired of waiting for your calls, when you said you'd call, 'specially when you said you would.
Tired of waiting for you, to help me out of water, so that I might not drown.
Verse 3
Can you see I'm stronger now
I've made myself move on
I won't keep running back
I'm now justa stranger on the street
I won't let you pull me down any longer
Verse 3 Revision - Please let me know what you think.
Can't you see I'm stonger and made myself move on? I won't keep running back...
To you I'm just a stranger now, walking down the street, I won't let you pull me down any longer.
(Needs one more part here to complete it.)
Verse 4
So don't cry when you wake
Cause I won't be there to comfort you
Cause I have gone I have moved on now babe
Verse 4 Revision - Please let me know what you think.
So, don't cry when you wake, and I'm not around, 'cause I won't be there for you anymore
I have moved on now, a thing I had to do, but still don't really know inside of me.
It's a choice I've made, because I never know if or whether you really care. (to chorus)
Chorus
Do you really love me
Do you really miss me
Or is this just a dream I'm living?
If not won't you send someone to wake me from my night mares
Chorus - Revision - Please let me know what you think.
Do you really love me and do you really miss me? Or, am I living just a dream?
If it's not a dream, but to me it seems it is, would you send someone to wake me from my nightmares?
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 10:47 PM
I live with my dad and his evil wife
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 10:52 PM
i live with my dad and his evil wife
It sounds like there are more things that need to be discussed here, Sam! Please know that I and others here really care about you. If needed, depending on how things go here, I will call in others to this thread who will be able to give you excellent advice concerning anything that might be troubling you. You are safe here, and much safer than you might be on many other sites!
I take it that his wife isn't your real mom. Is that true?
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 10:55 PM
Yea that's true and thanks for the support but I'm OK and I like working with you I have me mates and some adult mates that I can go to but thanks for the concern
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 10:56 PM
What is your name?
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 10:57 PM
Sam, I forgot to include your chorus as you had originally written it, in my post #37 above. I have now added it.
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 11:01 PM
what is your name?
It's Craig.
In your verse #4, you mention babe. Does that mean that this song is about a guy writing about a girl?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 11:02 PM
Yea it is
I like that name :)
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 11:06 PM
yea thats true and thanks for the support but im ok and i like working with you i have me mates and some adult mates that i can go to but thanks for the concern
Thanks, that's fair. I just wanted to make sure that you were getting the emotional and mental support that you need. I'm glad that you are. I like working with you, too!
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 11:08 PM
Yay I feel spechial lol any way soz abouot my spelling I have problems when it comes to spelling
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 11:14 PM
yay i feel spechial lol any way soz abouot my spelling i have problems when it comes to spelling
Your spelling could be improved, and I'm trying to help you with the placement of your words for your song. Sometimes for songs and/or poetry, it's okay to break some of the normal rules for punctuation and spelling as well as grammar. Have you tried using the Spell Check at the bottom of the rectangle where you answer questions?
Because of the site upgrade, it hasn't been working. I like to use the one at the top right of the rectangle that has the little ABC above it. It works great! Have never had a problem with it. I think that if you click on it, that you will have to download it and it will also be integrated into the browser that you normally use.
ArticMonkey
Oct 13, 2008, 11:17 PM
Thanks any way I have to go now I will be back on around tomorrow same time
Xx
Thanks love
Sam
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 11:23 PM
yea it is
i like that name :)
Thanks! If you're a girl, is your name really Sam? I understand if you have to go. It's all right!
Clough
Oct 13, 2008, 11:39 PM
I'll be back tomorrow also, and looking forward to further developing the song that you are wanting to write. So far, it seems to be going pretty well.
I'm not sure exactly what time though, because I have to lead a very large number of men in a Guest Night for one of the local barbershop choruses that I direct. We usually go out and have something that's called an "afterglow" after those kinds of events. Usually we go to an restaurant type of place.
If you have checked out the site that has the Virtual Keyboard on it, I would appreciate knowing what you think about it. Using it in the development of this thread as well as in the development of your song could really come in handy!
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 09:19 PM
Yes I am a girl and my name is samantha elizabeth but sam for short
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 09:21 PM
Yea I saw the keybord its cool
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 09:56 PM
Looks like I just missed you, Sam! I am on now. Just got back home a little while ago.
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 10:01 PM
Heyy I'm still on
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 10:15 PM
It looked like you had logged off. I'm going to enable you to see that I'm also online now.
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 10:18 PM
No I hadn't lol I had just closed the browser
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 10:21 PM
Thanks! So, that's why the site wasn't "seeing" you anymore as being online here.
I think that I asked you on your other thread something about how much piano you do know how to play. Would you please tell me a little bit about what you do know how to play, please? Knowing that will help me to help you the best concerning your song becoming a song that is set to music!
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 10:24 PM
I can play beginer piano I used to play I played for about 4 months
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 10:30 PM
Can you play harmonically, three-note chords in your left hand and at the same time play a melody with your right hand?
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 10:38 PM
Yea
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 10:41 PM
Thanks! What are the notes that are in a "C" chord, please?
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 10:44 PM
Umm I don't no chords :S I'm not that's good any more accuaily I suck my teacher can play
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 10:47 PM
If I asked you to play a C, E and G all at exactly the same time with your left hand, would you be able to do it?
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 10:48 PM
Yea
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 10:55 PM
Thanks! If I asked you to play the song, "Mary Had a Little Lamb" starting with the middle finger of your right hand, on the "E" above middle "C" and without using any music, would you be able to play that song?
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 10:57 PM
C, E and G are the notes that the "C" chord, is composed of by the way, just so you know. That is one of the chords that we could use in your song.
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:02 PM
Um probably not
But when I learn sonething I can play it for life I'm a fast learner
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:06 PM
I can play the c chord than do you have most of the music for it ?
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:12 PM
um probly not
but when i learn sonething i can play it for life im a fast learner
I believe you when you say that you are a fast learner!
Do you know the song "Mary Had a Little Lamb?" I'm just trying to figure out how well you can play so that you will be able to play your song, after we finalize what the writing of the words to it is going to be.
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:14 PM
Yea I no the song but not very well I neva gew up with child's songs I gew up with hard core songs
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:17 PM
B bflat b bflat b f a g e
I can play that
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:17 PM
i can play the c chord than do you have most of the music for it ?
If you mean the music for your song that might be written out, no, not on paper. But, the sound of the music for it comes to me immediately when I see the words that can be put to music. It can be put to actual, printed music later. Writing a song is a process that can sometimes take quite a bit of time.
Your song will take at least a few more, different chords in order for it to sound the best. If you can play the "C" chord, then that's a good start!
What I'm trying to get to here, in the immediate future, is for you to be able to play, at least a little bit of your song using that Virtual Keyboard that I showed to you.
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:19 PM
Yea
Like I'm going to start learning piano soon at school
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:21 PM
yea i no the song but not very well i neva gew up with childs songs i gew up with hard core songs
If you at least know the song a little bit, I would like for you to open up another browser in addition to this one, if you would, please?
You can play "Mary Had a Little Lamb" right away! I will show you how to do that!
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:22 PM
OK done
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:26 PM
Please open up the following link in the other browser.
VIRTUAL KEYBOARD - PIANO (http://www.bgfl.org/bgfl/custom/resources_ftp/client_ftp/ks2/music/piano/index.htm)
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:27 PM
Done
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:36 PM
All the notes that we are going to use for "Mary Had a Little Lamb" will be between the two C's on the keyboard.
Below, are the notes to "Mary Had a Little Lamb", first verse. Please play it and let me know how it goes.
E, D, C, D, E, E, E,
D, D, D, E, G, G,
E, D, C, D, E, E, E, E,
D, D, E, D, C
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:37 PM
The words to those same notes are as follows:
Mary had a little lamb,
Little lamb, little lamb.
Mary had a little lamb,
It's fleece was white as snow.
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:38 PM
Yea I done it that was easy
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:40 PM
Good! Do you have a piano or music keyboard of some kind at home?
ArticMonkey
Oct 14, 2008, 11:41 PM
No but I do at skewl
Clough
Oct 14, 2008, 11:49 PM
no but i do at skewl
Please do check your spelling, Sam! Skewl is correctly spelled, school.
Your objective here as well as mine, is for you to learn how to write a song. You've already mentioned something about your spelling in another post. So, we might as well learn something else while we are doing the thing that this post is originally about. Wouldn't you agree?
If the current Spell Check at the bottom of the posting rectangle where you post doesn't work, you can use the one at the top right of the posting rectangle that has the ABC above it. You will need to download it, though. It's perfectly safe. I downloaded it and use it all of the time.
I make mistakes in my spelling all of the time. Checking the spelling really helps me! There are still some words that I have trouble spelling, even though I check spelling on a regular basis.
Clough
Oct 15, 2008, 09:32 PM
If you're around Sam, would you please move your mouse to this site? You can play at least part of your song by using the Virtual Keyboard. It won't be hard. I will show you how to do it.
Thanks!
summerskye08
Oct 15, 2008, 09:46 PM
Hi,
Just a simple advice... listen to what your heart says.. from there you can begin writing simple words. You have to be in the mood too before you could do it and of course inspired by someone.. happy thoughts could help you write good lyrics, it does not matter whether they rhyme or not. Again listen to your heart that is where true words come from.
summerskye08
Clough
Oct 15, 2008, 09:55 PM
hi,
Just a simple advice... listen to what your heart says.. from there you can begin writing simple words. you have to be in the mood too before you could do it and of course inspired by someone.. happy thoughts could help you write good lyrics, it does not matter whether they rhyme or not. Again listen to your heart that is where true words come from.
summerskye08
Hi, summerskye08!
Those are good thoughts that you have! I also hope that you read through the posts from the beginning of this thread that has now gone on for nine pages. Sam's really quite good at coming up with the creative words and ideas to use concerning her thoughts!
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 15, 2008, 11:04 PM
Hello are you there can u teach me please
Clough
Oct 15, 2008, 11:12 PM
Hello to you too, Sam!
Yes, I'm here. Please give me a few minutes to put notes to the words so that you can play a little of your song. Please open another browser so that you have the keyboard also.
Thanks!
Clough
Oct 15, 2008, 11:25 PM
Here are the notes to the first line of your song that go along with the words. Where there is an underscore (_) beside a note, that's where you will hold the note a little longer.
You might think of the rhythm as going something like this: 1234_and 1234_and1234_3212_
E E E E_ C D D D D_ D E E E G_ F E D E_
Why do you call and why do you stare, and why do you tell me to beware?
Please let me know how it goes using the keyboard. Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 15, 2008, 11:25 PM
OK
Clough
Oct 15, 2008, 11:27 PM
Okay, the notes aren't quite spaced correctly above the notes. I'm not sure that I can fix that, but will work on it. It looked okay when I was writing it.
ArticMonkey
Oct 15, 2008, 11:31 PM
Yea it sound good any way I have to go talk to you tamoz good night xoxo love sammy
Clough
Oct 15, 2008, 11:32 PM
Here it is, fixed up a little bit better so that you can understand where the notes go above the words.
E----E---E---E_-C---D---D---D--D_---D----E---E--E--G_--F--E--D-E_
Why do you call and why do you stare, and why do you tell me to beware?
Clough
Oct 16, 2008, 12:30 AM
yea it sound good any way i have to go talk to you tamoz good night xoxo love sammy
Okay, I do understand. We'll connect later then...
Thanks!
Clough
Oct 16, 2008, 10:23 PM
Hi, Sam!
If you're there, would you please move your mouse?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 19, 2008, 03:21 PM
Heyy I'm here soz I haven't been on for a while I'm on now
Clough
Oct 19, 2008, 10:15 PM
Hi, Sam!
I wish that I'd have been able to be on here earlier when you were on! Hopefully, we will be on at the same time sometime soon!
I hope that you are well!
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 20, 2008, 10:17 PM
Yes I'm well but dads not lol tummy bug
Clough
Oct 20, 2008, 10:29 PM
Hi, Sam!
I'm here right now. Just logged onto the site. I'm sorry your dad's not feeling well. Does he have the flu?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 20, 2008, 10:43 PM
Yea its cool any way how far did you get with the music?
Clough
Oct 20, 2008, 10:51 PM
I was waiting for you to return and us to be on at the same time. I'd rather work on it when you are here, it would work much better that way because then I wouldn't have to do a bunch of work and then maybe you not really liking what I did. It's best to take things in the song one verse at a time...
Were you able to play on the virtual keyboard what I have already written and did it make sense to you?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Oct 21, 2008, 09:35 PM
Yer I did um it made a lot of scence can you send the key bored again
Clough
Oct 22, 2008, 12:25 AM
Hi, Sam!
Below is the link to how to get to the keyboard again.
VIRTUAL KEYBOARD - PIANO (http://www.bgfl.org/bgfl/custom/resources_ftp/client_ftp/ks2/music/piano/index.htm)
Are you able to sing along with what you play? I'm glad that it's making sense to you!
I'm usually on about the time that you were on when posting what you did above. I will be on about that same time on most nights for me. However, I couldn't be on then because I had to do a lot of practicing on the piano.
I'll work on getting you some additional things to play for your song that you are writing.
Later...
celina mae
Oct 22, 2008, 12:29 AM
You should first have a main topic. You're mom then think of the words or things you want to tell her then from those words you could make and then think of a tune:)
Clough
Oct 22, 2008, 12:52 AM
you should first have a main topic. you're mom then think of the words or things you want to tell her then from those words you could make and then think of a tune:)
Hi, celina mae!
Those are definitely good ideas that you have! You also might want to check out how her song that she is writing has been developed so far by clicking on other pages of this thread.
Thanks!
Clough
Nov 2, 2008, 05:15 PM
Hi, Sam!
I do hope that you will return to here. Below, are some additional notes added to the ones that we've already composed, so that you can play and sing more of your song.
E----E--E---E__C---D---D--D---D____D---E---E--E---G__F---E--D-E___
Why do you call and why do you stare, and why do you tell me to beware?
E----E--E---E__C---D---D--D---D____D---E---E--E--G__F---E----D-E___
Why do you hug and why do you kiss, and why do you always seem to miss?
C-C---C__F____A__G___E__C--C-C------C--F_A__G____C-C-C------C--D_E__C__
Is this because you love me, or because you really don't, or because you really won't?
ibabysit
Nov 2, 2008, 05:31 PM
It is very simple!I wrote a song to my mom for her b-day one time all you have to do is find a phrase or a word anything like that and in my head things start poping up again that I can put in their use your feelings it is really simple once you get started just relax and be calm and it all will come to you I love to write songs good luck
ArticMonkey
Nov 2, 2008, 05:34 PM
Hey thanks sorry I haven't been on I've been very sick any way I'm still sick but I'm getting better
Clough
Nov 2, 2008, 05:36 PM
it is very simple!i wrote a song to my mom for her b-day one time all you have to do is find a phrase or a word anything like that and in my head things start poping up again that i can put in their use ur feelings it is really simple once u get started just relax and be calm and it all will come to u i love to write songs good luck
Hi, ibabysit!
Did you put your song to actual music?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Nov 2, 2008, 05:37 PM
Hiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii iii
Clough
Nov 2, 2008, 05:38 PM
hey thanks sorry i havent been on iv been very sick any way im still sick but im getting better
Hey, that's okay! I'm sorry that you've been very sick! :( Would you mind sharing what it was that you were sick with? I'm glad that you're getting better! :)
Thanks!
Clough
Nov 2, 2008, 07:00 PM
Okay Sam, I can see that you're not logged on here anymore right now. I have to go.
I hope that you feel all better in a short time!
Please do practice playing and singing what we've written so far and let me know what you think, okay?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Nov 2, 2008, 07:08 PM
Its cool I'm finding it hard to play but ill get it and yer just ad something wrng with my overys and I keept barfing :L lol gross I no
Clough
Nov 3, 2008, 06:25 AM
Hey, Sam!
Here's the first part of your song actually set to music! Maybe you or one of your friends could play it!
ArticMonkey
Nov 4, 2008, 01:35 PM
Omg thank you
Clough
Nov 5, 2008, 03:29 AM
Hi, Sam!
You're welcome! I hope that what I posted is helpful to you!
I do have a fancier one that I wrote for you. Am trying to find a way so that you can actually hear the music on this site. Not sure how to do that yet. Am doing some investigating...
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Nov 5, 2008, 01:44 PM
Thanks for all you have done I really apprshiate it
Clough
Nov 6, 2008, 03:20 AM
That's no problem and my pleasure, Sam!
Were you able to play what I wrote?
Thanks!
Clough
Nov 6, 2008, 04:04 AM
Dear Sam,
Below are a couple of images of the fancier version of the first part of your song that I wrote for you. I do hope that you're able to play it! If not, then someone who is really good at the piano should be able to do that. I needed to make it two images because adding the extra notes in the left hand made it a lot bigger.
Thanks!
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ArticMonkey
Nov 6, 2008, 01:40 PM
Um no I wasn't but my teacher is teching it to me thanks
Clough
Nov 6, 2008, 06:41 PM
That's great that your teacher is teaching you how to play it! The first version isn't all that hard at all.
We can work on more, if you would like to.
I do hope that you're feeling better! :)
Thanks!
Clough
Nov 8, 2008, 12:22 AM
Hi, Sam!
Here's another version for the first part of your song, in case you might like to try it! :)
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Clough
Nov 11, 2008, 05:31 AM
I'm concerned about you Sam and hope that you're okay! Haven't seen you around here in a number of days.
ArticMonkey
Nov 11, 2008, 02:01 PM
Sorry have been working on a proformance at school I have to sing at a assembily on Friday so I've been very bussy I'm singing unforgettable by dean geyer and caitlin stasey
Clough
Nov 11, 2008, 11:57 PM
Thanks for letting me know what was going on with you, Sam! I appreciate it! That's cool that you're going to be singing in an assembly at school! I'll look forward to hearing about how that goes!
ArticMonkey
Nov 12, 2008, 01:47 PM
I'm not singing I can't my dads mate just went in hospital and it hitting me hard hje had a heart attact he's like my other dad and I don't no what to do I don't want to lose him I love him too much
Clough
Nov 13, 2008, 05:03 AM
I do understand how you feel, Sam! It's really hard to do something that is from yourself and means a lot to you when someone dear to you is hurting!
What you might consider doing is hoping and praying for the best for your dad's mate, Sam! I hope and pray for the best for you!
ArticMonkey
Nov 13, 2008, 01:40 PM
Thanks he is getting better now to
Clough
Nov 14, 2008, 05:58 AM
Hey, Sam!
I'm glad that your dad's mate is getting better! To keep you in good spirits, keep your hope up and to give you something else to practice, here's some written music to the second verse of your song. It's different than the first verse.
Here were the words:
Verse 2
Tired of looking in the mirror, only seeing me there, 'specially when you're right here beside me.
Tired of waiting for your calls, when you said you'd call, 'specially when you said you would.
Tired of waiting for you, to help me out of the water, so that I might not drown.
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Clough
Nov 14, 2008, 06:14 AM
You know what, Sam? If you wanted to write the words to a song about the way that you've been feeling about things right now, we could do that! If it's in a minor key, it could really be something beautiful!
We can always keep working on your other song.
Please let me know.
Thanks!
Clough
Nov 20, 2008, 06:29 AM
Are you okay, Sam? I haven't seen you around here for a number of days and just wanted to know if you're okay.
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Nov 20, 2008, 02:03 PM
Yer I'm OK sorry have been preoccupyed with mates and guys lol I'm kind of sort of giving up in singing atm any ways cya and thanks for every thing loves
Sammy
Clough
Nov 23, 2008, 09:12 AM
Thanks, Sam!
I really enjoyed working on this project with you! I'm also glad that you're occupied with some things where you'll have fun and feel good about yourself!
Please let me know if you would like do any work as far as continuing to write and play music, as I would be glad to help you!
I wish for you only the best! :)
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Nov 23, 2008, 05:24 PM
I am accualy writing a story atm and yer I love writing I'm ready the twilight series atm by stephenie meyer
Cyaz xox
Bye
Loves sammyantha
Clough
Nov 24, 2008, 03:25 AM
Who knows? You could be famous someday by what you write, Sammy!
I am glad that your spirits are higher now and that you're doing positive thing and feeling better about yourself!
Are you still practicing the piano?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Nov 24, 2008, 01:44 PM
Yer I'm practising a song called Bella's Lullaby - River Flows In You - Yiruma
Clough
Nov 25, 2008, 06:42 AM
Thanks for the update, Sammy! Please do keep me posted about what's happening and whether you'd like to write a song of any kind or not here. I'd love to help you!
Thanks!
Clough
Mar 29, 2009, 11:27 PM
Hey, Sam!
I haven't seen you around here in a very long time! I hope that you're doing really well!
I just wanted to let you know that I finally found a way for you to here the music for your song the way that I hear it! You can hear it by clicking on the following link! It's the more complicated version of the music.
Sam's Song - More Complicated.wav (http://www.snapdrive.net/files/595417/Sam%27s%20Song%20-%20More%20Complicated.wav)
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Mar 30, 2009, 07:29 PM
Omg thanks lol I haven't been on in a long time I'm now in new zealand with my mom
ArticMonkey
Mar 30, 2009, 07:31 PM
Sounds good.
Clough
Mar 30, 2009, 10:33 PM
You're welcome, Sam! I'm glad that you liked it!
If you would like to continue with writing your song, I would be glad to help you! Since it would be a lot easier now that you can hear what is composed shortly after it's written.
Or, if you would like to write something new to which you might want to have set to music, we could do that too!
Please let me know...
I hope that things are okay with your family!
Are they?
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Mar 31, 2009, 12:39 PM
Yer my familys fine and so am I its my 16th birthday tomorrow did you no so I won't be on at all
Cyaaz
Thanks so much
Clough
Apr 1, 2009, 02:41 AM
HAPPY BIRTHDAY, SAM!!!!
:p :D :)
ArticMonkey
Apr 1, 2009, 11:36 PM
Thanks omg I brought a kitten his name is nightmare he is 11 years old and is blacky gray I brought him for 15 dollars
Clough
Apr 4, 2009, 12:05 AM
If Nightmare is 11 years old, then he's not a kitten, but a cat!
But, there's really nothing wrong in thinking of him being a "kitten" in your eyes.
Would you like to write a song about your cat? Nightmare would be a great subject for a song!
I hope that he's a good cat and that you had a great birthday! :)
ArticMonkey
Apr 5, 2009, 01:17 PM
accualy hes not 11 years old hes 11 weeks old lol
and i changed his name to fang from the cartoon mona the vampire lol
ArticMonkey
Apr 5, 2009, 01:20 PM
http://i292.photobucket.com/albums/mm29/sexy-pupp/Picture-1.jpg
This is fang
Clough
Apr 5, 2009, 08:35 PM
Cute kitten, Sam! :)
ArticMonkey
Apr 6, 2009, 01:37 PM
:>:p
ArticMonkey
Jul 24, 2009, 06:22 PM
accualy hes not 11 years old hes 11 weeks old lol
and i changed his name to fang from the cartoon mona the vampire lol
Well he's not a kitten any more
nothing lasts
Aug 3, 2009, 10:28 AM
Your a wonderful mother
Your always there
How can I not love you
When your always there?
I love seeing you happy
I wish you always be
I truly love that
Don't u see?
nothing lasts
Aug 3, 2009, 10:28 AM
I wish u like it
nothing lasts
Aug 3, 2009, 10:29 AM
Your a wonderful mother
Your always there
How can I not love you
When your always CARE
I love seeing you happy
I wish you always be
I truly love that
Don't u see?
ArticMonkey
Aug 3, 2009, 08:02 PM
Thank you
ArticMonkey
Aug 3, 2009, 08:05 PM
Cute kitten, Sam!! :)
Well he is no longer a kitten and here's a pik of what he looks like now
nothing lasts
Aug 4, 2009, 10:17 AM
Anytime
ArticMonkey
Aug 4, 2009, 08:51 PM
:)
Its good I have to say that but this is an old thread and I already wrote her a song but thanks for it anyway
Clough
Aug 10, 2009, 11:37 PM
Thanks for posting the pic of your cat, Sam! That's really some green eyes there! I hope that you're doing well!
I've been having some medical issues that have required hospitalization and rest. So, I haven't been on this site as much as I normally would.
Clough
Aug 10, 2009, 11:40 PM
Hi too, nothing lasts!
If you would like to develop any lyrics that you've written into music that you can hear, I would love to help you to do that! We would need to do that by you starting a separate thread, though.
Thanks!
ArticMonkey
Aug 11, 2009, 09:24 PM
How come you were in hospital what happened
Clough
Aug 12, 2009, 12:05 AM
I damaged my neck with a very difficult paint job on a ceiling. The damage has affected much of what I'm able to do or not to do. Thanks for asking! :)
williecoleman19
Sep 24, 2009, 03:13 AM
Hi, willie
Thanks for posting something here as I suggested on the other thread. I will be back on later tonight in around three hours. I'm not home on my own computer.
To start the lyrics of the song, please just post here some ideas in words or sentences about how you feel about your mom, like maybe things that you like about her and why you are writing the song.
The thoughts don't necessarily have to be in any order - just random ideas, sentences and single words by themselves are even okay. Then, we can go from there to develop the song.
Just let your ideas flow and please don't get caught up that everything might need to be perfect right off the bat.
Okay? :)
Thanks! I love my mom she is the best mom in the hold world when I was born I was so so happy come in to this word in I so very to have a mom like her she is the best mom in the hold world today hey that I every so in she help her kids make dream come ture now I'm 19 doing everything I could do for her in make her live the life that she can if it not was for god I will never have a great mom like her
Clough
Sep 24, 2009, 03:35 PM
how come you were in hospital what happened
Hi Sam!
I'm sorry that this is now old!
I messed up my neck with a paint job on a ceiling that I did. That's how I wound up in the hospital. What was wrong with me physically, is complicated... Nothing major. Result was that I was having a major panic attack.
Thanks!
Clough
Sep 24, 2009, 03:36 PM
i love my mom she is the best mom in the hold world when i was born i was so so happy come in to this word in i so very to have a mom like her she is the best mom in the hold world today hey that i every so in she help her kids make dream come ture now im 19 doing everything i could do for her in make her live the life that she can if it not was for god i will never have a great mom like her
Hi, williecoleman19!
So, would you like to start a thread about a song that you might like to write?
Thanks!
Clough
Jun 22, 2010, 11:50 PM
Hi, Sam!
Are you okay? Haven't seen you around here in a really long time.
It's because of you that I learned how to play Bella's Lullaby!
Thanks!
AlainaG08
Dec 15, 2010, 02:49 PM
Hey I was wondering could you write me a song, PLEASE?