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Delow84
Feb 6, 2008, 12:41 AM
This isn't a question just something I wrote tonight while being down. :) I took from some personal experiences and some things I SHOULD have made personal experiences.
Hope you all like :)

A Valentines Day Dream

Good morning, sweetheart. I wanted to tell you I love you.
No, you don't have to get up. Just lie there for a few.
Yeah, something was burning. I tried making you breakfast.
Hey you! Don't laugh. I really did try my best.

No, I'm done. I ran over and got us some Denny's.
I stopped and got the syrup you like; we didn't have any.
You just relax and I'll go fix you a tray.
No, don't worry about it. Today is your day.

Here you go, love. Of course I got blueberry pancakes!
They are your favorite, for goodness sakes.
And yes, that's a real rose; I picked it on the way home,
But our neighbor might be mad. That's probably him on the phone.

Yes, I'm staring. I just love when you smile,
I was thinking we could go to the park, haven't been in a while.
A picnic? Yeah, that is a great idea, baby!
Yeah, I know we haven't gone out much lately.

Oh, of course I'll go and start the bath for you.
Just let me know when you are through.
Why? Because I want to ask you something.
What? Well, a few weeks ago I bought this ring...

Sorry. I'm nervous. I blew the surprise.
And no, it wasn't a quarter machine prize!
Here, let me put it on your finger. Hold it up. Let's see.
Oh God, I love when you smile! Will you marry me?

-Ernie


I don't know, to me that sounds like a great beginning to Valentine's Day, or really any day.

imation
Feb 6, 2008, 07:29 AM
That sounded so natural, I wish I could write lyrics like that aye... you'd be a good song writer want to gimmie some tips?? Haha but seriously

Delow84
Feb 6, 2008, 01:32 PM
Song? Wow lol I thought I just wrote a poem... thanks imation :)

HistorianChick
Feb 6, 2008, 01:56 PM
Oh, Delow... that brought tears to my eyes.

That is simply beautiful.

Absolutely perfect.

Simply idyllic.

You have a gift - thanks for giving us all a part of it.

blk_beauty
Feb 6, 2008, 02:13 PM
That was so lovely, wish I was that person lol!

Delow84
Feb 6, 2008, 02:32 PM
Thanks guys, I don't know I just got in the mood to write, and wanted it to be a situation that showed an incredible amount of love in the simplest of ways. And that's what came out I'm glad you guys like it :)

And I wish I could meet that person that I could live that dream with lol

HistorianChick
Feb 6, 2008, 02:33 PM
Focus on that star, darlin... you will.

Delow84
Feb 6, 2008, 02:36 PM
I actually believe that HC :)

Delow84
Feb 6, 2008, 10:42 PM
I edited the poem, adding a line to finish the last stanza (that I got some help from wondergirl for the idea!) Thanks everyone who has giving me any kind of criticism and feedback!

I am glad so many people have liked this poem, some laugh and like it cause its cute, some tear up because its sweet... and when you have someone say "I dont know whether to laugh or cry" it makes you feel like you wrote something worth writing :)

friend4u178
Feb 15, 2008, 07:13 PM
Delow
You soppy sod :-) (Just kidding mate)
You sound like a perfect candidate to read "Suzannes Diary for Nicholas" what do you reckon HC?

HistorianChick
Feb 15, 2008, 09:11 PM
Already suggested it! There you Darlin Delow, if hunky Australian F4U recommends it, it must be OK! ;)

Delow84
Feb 15, 2008, 09:31 PM
LOL I'm going to have to pick it up, I'm off tomorrow so ill grab a few books at book store before I head out on my 2hr drive to get my puppy hopefully lol.

HistorianChick
Feb 16, 2008, 01:50 PM
YAY! You're getting the puppy! I kind of figured you wouldn't wait! ;)

Good, you sure will enjoy Suzanne's Diary for Nicholas... Its da bomb.

Delow84
Feb 16, 2008, 07:49 PM
So I got my puppy :) hour and a half drive there, 2 hours talking, 700 paid, a wonderfully beautiful puppy in my lap on the hour and half ride back. But can't think of a name! A black and white Papillon... damn I won't get any sleep thinking of a name. But at least ill be thinking of something good rather then bad :P

friend4u178
Feb 17, 2008, 01:15 AM
OK
We need a name for Delows puppy... what about Jessie :-)

HistorianChick
Feb 17, 2008, 08:03 AM
F4U... you're just too sweet! Man... I actually said, "Awwwww!!! :D"

But yes, I do agree, Delow, what's her puppy's name?

Delow84
Feb 17, 2008, 12:09 PM
Still no name, but had a GREAT night...
Went to pool hall with friend thinking only going to be a few hours. (only went to flirt with this waitress there that I met the night before lol) We ended up having drinks paid for us by some Navy guys because I almost hit one with a stray cue ball off the break... lol
So that was awesome that we got free drinks... of course I flirted with the waitress, talked it up... even flirted and talked it up with the GM of the store lol. Meh anyway another friend showed up and we got him in (him being 20 :( ) so that was cool cause he and I are like the coolest guys to hang out with lol.

So a friend of my friend nick who went in the beginning, wanted to play pool for money. Lol I love playing for money. So this guy is obviously good, I can see it in how he plays. We played for 3 bucks to start. All I had on me, I won. So he wanted to play for 20 (he was an obviously amateur hustler) I played him race to 3 for 20. Won 3-0. and I can see him messing up, and see the shots he was throwing. So played for 40 next, 3-2 me. :P which I think he atually tried but I just came out on that one. But he wanted to play for 100 to show me 'what he can really do'... pfft I had my money to pay for the night and was a little drunk so I stopped lol. So I spent of my own money, 10 bucks after 7 hours till closing. My friend mike (the 20yr old) kept joking he was going to show me up and get the waitress' number lol... so I kept talking to her, and got her number and a 'date' Wednesday. Going to meet up like at a starbcks or something and talk about art (she freiggin draws, is into games, loves anime and japanese culture) lmao.

So we split at close, me and mike and this girl nick invited, back to my place. Nick split, me and mike kept drinking till about 5-6 am... I saw the sunrise. Playing halo or GH and just laughing having a great time. GOD
Prob the best weekend thus far.

Man just being able to say that makes me feel good, I never thought id have thatmuch fun, or have such cool things happen to me.

HistorianChick
Feb 18, 2008, 06:30 AM
man just being able to say that makes me feel good, i never thought id have thatmuch fun, or have such cool things happen to me.

I'm just amazed at how similar this is to your signature quote... very cool, Delow, very cool. ;)