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trevordog
Jul 13, 2007, 12:42 PM
Now I didn't rite thes my friend did and she thinks they suck and I think I love them

I see you from a distance.
Wishing you were mine.
I see you from a distance.
And inside I'm dying.
My eyes start to tear.
I wish you were here.
And I know that I
Shouldn't be trying.
I see you days later.
Saying you hate her.
Your heart torn in half.
I walk over and sit down.
Look around,
And start to ask you
What happened.
You look in my eyes.
I can tell you've been crying.
TEars now streaming
Down your face

JoeJaJoeJoe
Jul 13, 2007, 03:30 PM
I really like them, though I think the ending is a little weak. Just a little bit more closure on the end and those lyrics would be golden.

Canada_Sweety
Jul 13, 2007, 04:05 PM
The lyrics are great but maybe the ending could be fancied up a bit. Other wise it's perfect.

Haxzor50
Jul 13, 2007, 05:50 PM
A Perfect song, cept the end... you realise that is has no chorus? Which is perfectly okay with some songs, but most songs are atlease a minute and a half... try and time it?

I really like the lyrics though! Just watch the rhythm, and the ending, I would love to know what the guy is crying about!

macifrkn_rocks
Jul 16, 2007, 03:55 PM
Wow.
These frkn rock!
Whoever made these up must be a genious.
Oh wait!
That was me.
:D