this is a poem i wrote the other day, its pretty much a bunch of stuff that i had written on my hand while bored in maths, and some stuff thats been on my mind.
you think its any good? any way i can improve it? anything else i could do with it?

bushg

it's sad, but I really like your insightfullness on the last line.

xiaocake

I think you have potential on poems. Keep on writing

Megg

you have good words. lack in rythem. try to write a smaller poem. i cant understand this one, its kinda all over the place, doesnt flow or make sense. BUT i think given time and effort you could write nice stuff at some point, if u try. poetry isnt something that comes from tyring hard. its a natural gift. i wrote poetry while i was in school. i have a book full. beautiful way to express ones self.