poem.

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Sep 28, 2007, 02:14 PM

murshyblues

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poem.

How could I not see, what was ahead of me, the future I dreamed of the life I imagined,
It all came to an end the day I realized it was just a dream
A dream that I dream everyday and night for all my life,
the day my faith left and my hope fade, was when I realize it was nothing more than a dream, a wish that my heart made when I was asleep and awake.
Although deep inside I knew the truth, I pushed it away and pretended it was never there and kept on dreaming. I kept my faith and hope alive that one day it will all come to an end, but now I know, that day may never come.

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Oct 11, 2007, 11:41 PM	#2

Clough

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I apologize that no one else has answered you.

I do like your poem. Poems are things from your heart. They can take many forms.

I have just rearranged the form of it a little bit and made some grammar changes as to the articulation all so that it is more readable and understandable. I hope that you don't mind.

I won't rate it on the basis that I like it or hate it. That wouldn't be fair. It is a good poem, overall.

Perhaps others will have some ideas as to how it could further be improved, or offer their opinion as to what they think of it overall.

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