A letter draft

Nouf company · Aug 6, 2009, 09:05 AM

Hi mates, I'm nadja from spain. Since the english is not my native language i've bee frustrated to draft a letter. My question is I wanted to visit a company manufacturer to visit they place and wanted see their all textile products. But i'm wondering how could i send a letter to this company regarding my visiting. I'm looking forward from your kind help. Thank you in advance.

justcurious55 · Aug 6, 2009, 11:40 AM

ok. time for a second draft. you can post it here again. this time stick to facts. if you tell them you heard about them through their website and they don't have a website that's gonna seem fishy.

Nouf company · Aug 6, 2009, 11:54 AM

ok.

Mr. ****

I am Nadja from spain and i'm exporter and importer of textiles and stuff. I would like to know more about your products and will be glad if i could visit your company for this reason. Some of the products i'd been seen from one of my friends. And It would be great if we could start a new business relationship in india and spain.

best regards
Nadja

Will do??? mate

justcurious55 · Aug 6, 2009, 12:17 PM

better. but still needs improvement. "Stuff"-too general. either elaborate or end it at textiles.

I am an exporter and importer of textiles from Spain. I'm interested in the possibility of starting a business relationship between our companies. I've seen some of your products through a friend of mine and am interested in seeing more. Perhaps I can come and visit your company?

Best regards,
Nadja

i think what i wrote flows a little better but i believe it still gets to the point you want. if you wait a little while before you send it there's a better chance others will come along and they may have more suggestions for improvements.

Nouf company · Aug 6, 2009, 12:20 PM

thank u soooooooooooooooooooooooo much justcurious55. You helped me alot. This is wot i am looking for finally i got it. And ofcourse i will wait see and others suggesion too thanks once again cheers

justcurious55 · Aug 6, 2009, 12:23 PM

glad i could help

Nouf company · Aug 6, 2009, 12:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by justcurious55

better. but still needs improvement. "Stuff"-too general. either elaborate or end it at textiles.

I am an exporter and importer of textiles from Spain. I'm interested in the possibility of starting a business relationship between our companies. I've seen some of your products through a friend of mine and am interested in seeing more. Perhaps I can come and visit your company?

Best regards,
Nadja

i think what i wrote flows a little better but i believe it still gets to the point you want. if you wait a little while before you send it there's a better chance others will come along and they may have more suggestions for improvements.

Well done mate. You are fantastic and very compassionate. I'll keep in touch with you. Glad i found my need finally. Txs aloooooooot