Hello; I'm trying to start a band and It's going to be hard rock but I also want some calm piano songs on are Demo CD too. Kind of a Evanescence thing. But it is so hard wrighting songs. All I'm asking is for some one to turn my horrible songs into magic. Do not laugh when you read this but this is all I've got.

"What if there was no price to pay?
I'd do things my way
I wouldn't be bleeding my heart dry
We don't need this screaming
Don't yell at me becaues you prayed for me to die
If only I were breathing
I'd say to you goodbye
If only I left today......."

I know "Har Har" it sucks but give me a break I'm only 12 and it just came to me and I wrote it down. Anyway, please fix it or if you can wright a song for me useing my words. I would be so greatful. Thanks.

Clough

You've made some excellent suggestions there, ohsohappy!

ohsohappy

Thank you! I like to think positively! It helps people focus more throughout the day. incorporating that into her music could give her some very good insight. I think a lot of her influence comes from what she listens to. Which is good, but I'm sure she could find a way to put more of herself in there. I"m nto saying she has to write Hannah Montana songs (I can't stand her music) But, something more personal to her.

Clough

Hi again, ohsohappy!

Perhaps what she is writing is very personal to her? It will take a bit of delving to find that out, though.

I do like you idea about accentuating positive things! An excellent thought by you!

What we write, is a matter of choice...

Thanks!

ohsohappy

Well yeah that's quite possible. But even so, It would be an excellent idea for her to delve and express her happy side. Soo much sorrow for one so young.

AmyLeefreak

Oh, gosh I hate Hannah Montana and them but, I'll try. Happy songs are just so hard to do without being all corny.

AmyLeefreak

Well, like I said I'm just now learning and I'm trying to play a song called Good Enough by Evanescence. a.k.a Amy Lee.

AmyLeefreak

It's funny when you broke my heart
It was a rainy day
Clouds closing in
to say I made a mistake
Cried myself to sleep tonight
Thinking "What have I done"
But, when I thought life was washed away
I opened my eyes to find it wasn't like yesterday

Behinde the black lace
Opens up the world
Nothing to tell me
I was better off alone
I stand in the sun
To enbrace the feeling
Not even caring if it's not me

It's Saterday and I sit here missing
Everything that brought me to life
All the tree's in my feild of innocne
Made my heart race
But, you came and took me away
I wore a smile on my face
Looking back I know it's still sits
Deep inside

Behinde the black lace
Opens up the world
Nothing to tell me
I was better off alone
I stand in the sun
To embrace the feeling
Not even caring if it's not me

(That was my first kind of Happy song thing) I'll work on it later

AmyLeefreak

Wow! I think I did a really good job. But, please let me know if you find anything that needs to be fixed before I start to work on some music for it.


Lay here
So I'm not alone
Now you hate me
Without a guess I would fall
Made myself believe that
He's so wrong and could never save me

Breathing without me
Your only breathing without me
Just two worlds between us
I know it's hard
But, don't follow me
I've found my place without you
My name was on that grave before you
There's nothing you can do
I've fallen into his trap
Unforgiven, I reached for his hand

Don't take in each word
They say I left becaues I'm worthless
Never to think that thier words took me over the edge
When you've crossed that line
Tell me how does it feel
To be so cold inside
Your body becomes numb
I need to feel something again

Breathing without me
Your only breathing without me
Just two worlds between us
I know it's hard
But, don't follow me
I've found my place without you
My name was on that grave before you
There's nothing you can do
I've fallen into his trap
Unforgiven, I reached for his hand

I'm better off without this
But, why did you lie
She died and you siad I'd be Ok
He touched me and you said you had me
What happened to never letting go?
I thought I knew you
I couldn't stand it anymore

Breathing without me
I'm just breathing without you now
Just two diffrent worlds
And yet you cry as lay
In you arms
Drinking in your tears
I lay there bleeding
But, I know I'm still here
It's just not the same as yesterday.....

Clough

Hi again, AmyLeefreak!

I'm still not sure what you're able to do, musically. Are you really able to play the sheet music to "Good Enough" by Evanescence on the piano?

If you could give me more of an idea concerning what you're able to play, that would be helpful.

Thanks!

AmyLeefreak

Well, I'm just now learning. I'm only able to play at my friends house and will be taking lessons soon. I'm in choir so I'm learning how to also read music a little better. So I'm a little unsure myself